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Tintin in the Land of the Soviets

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I've listed this article for peer review because it's recently been revamped with new information taken from good published sources, and has had two new images included. Peer review being a necessary step before requesting featured article status, it is here that I have first turned.

Thanks, Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:04, 13 January 2011 (UTC)

Comments: It's very nice to see how the article has been developed recently, very well done! I hope that you will improve more articles about Tintin albums in the future! 85.11.25.101 (talk) 12:24, 14 January 2011 (UTC)

• I don't think you need to have any references in the plot summery, it is given that this section refers the work itself. You may keep the citation for the quote, but specify the exact page it is on.

Comments from Arthur Holland

Never done a peer review before, so apologies if any of the following is questionable/just plain wrong.

Looks well referenced, well balanced, covers the controversial aspects of the work, Herge's embarrasment, political background.

Criticisms I do have are fairly minor:

• Language could use polishing:

• "ran the newspaper that Le Petit Vingtième was a supplement to, the right wing Roman Catholic weekly, Le XXe Siècle." little bit awkward
• "The two would soon meet the following year" - tautological

• Some grammar issues:

• "attempts to kill Tintin by trying to slip him over a banana skin"
• "he finally allowed for an official reprint"

• Is "Tintinologist" a valid term, or at least formal enough for an encyclopedia? And if it is, I think it's overused: "Tintinologist Harry Thompson" only needs to be introduced as such the first time.
• I think the plot summary is a little too long and detailed as per WP:PLOTSUM.
• Is four columns for the refs is a bit much
• Was there any backlash from the USSR/Communist groups? Nothing is mentioned.
• Maybe put one of the images on the left for balance?

Arthur Holland (talk) 15:32, 15 January 2011 (UTC)