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I've listed this article for peer review because…
I'm sure this has potential to be a featured article in Wikipedia. Since USMA is a featured article, so can this one. Thanks, Ziggyseventh (talk) 19:22, 23 August 2010 (UTC)
- Comments Overall a good article with some issues, a trimming would do a world of good. Sandman888 (talk) 08:28, 28 August 2010 (UTC)
- References
- Several deadlinks, check
- WW2 to present
- list like prose in much of it.
- "In 1991, Midshipman Juliane Gallina, class of 1992, became the first woman brigade commander. On 29 January 1994, the first genderless service assignment was held. All billets were opened equally to men and women with the exception of special warfare and submarine duty.
The initial 150th anniversary celebration was held in Alumni Hall on 13 January 1995. "An Evening Under the Stars." It featured a Naval Academy Band/Glee Club concert, the premiere showing of a documentary film, U. S. Naval Academy; 150 Years in Annapolis, and introduction of astronauts who were academy graduates." References?
- "Ex Scientia Tridens," translate first time
- "Naval Academy traditions" consider deleting sections, it adds little to the article.
Ruhrfisch comments: I agree with Sandman's comments above, here are some suggestions for improvement. There are two major issues that would prevent this from becoming a WP:GA in its current state, let along a WP:FA
- The biggest issue I see is a lack of references and other issues related to sources - large sections of the article are completely unreferenced. This would be a quick fail at GAN or FAC.
- My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
- Internet refs need URL, title, author if known, publisher and date accessed. {{cite web}} and other cite templates may be helpful. See WP:CITE and WP:V
- I also note that many of the sources are to the Navy or its websites. As much as possible, reliable sources which are independent of the USNA should be used. As this is a national institution with a long history, finding books and other independent third-party sources should not be too difficult.
- The other major issuer is the prose. FAs are supposed to have a professional level of English. This does not meet that.
- It has many short (one or two sentence) paragraphs which impede the flow of the article and should either be combined with others or perhaps expanded.
- As noted it also has many bullet point lists, which should in almost all cases be converted to regular prose
- The USMA article is a great model for ideas and examples to follow - it is fully referenced and the text flows much better. I also note it has a fair number of traditions in it - if there are relaible sources for them, they can probably be briefly included.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). I do not watch peer reviews, so if you have questions or comments, please contact me on my talk page. Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 13:10, 29 August 2010 (UTC)