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University of Manchester Library[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because…: the stable version of the article in existence for a long time was changed to a version which I believe is less historically accurate so it would be useful to hear what other editors think about those changes.

Thanks, Johnsoniensis (talk) 08:16, 27 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the late review User:Johnsoniensis. Some issues I found are:

Clean up the lead to at maximum four paragraphs with each one having two or three sentences focused on the same subjects.
The last sentences from Contents are unsourced.
Same with Library buildings.
You could also merge Partial refurbishment with Libary buildings unless you are going to expand the former.
1851–1936 is too long for a single paragraph. Try splitting them to at least two with each keeping references.
Moses Tyson is unsourced
"Frederick Ratcliffe to Jan Wilkinson" is unsourced.
Same with "Former librarians"

Anyway, good luck with the article. I'm also doing a peer review here so I would appreciate some feedback. Good luck with the article.Tintor2 (talk) 14:36, 8 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]