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WarCry (band)[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because in my opinion it has reached a good status within the Spanish metal music, and since the article's previous FA nomination it's been significantly improved.

Thanks, Rockk3r Spit it Out! 22:04, 23 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article, here are some suggestions for improvement.

The lead should be an accessible and inviting overview of the whole article and should be expanded to 2 or 3 paragraphs. Nothing important should be in the lead only - since it is a summary, it should all be repeated in the body of the article itself. My rule of thumb is to include every header in the lead in some way. Please see WP:LEAD
Since this is the English Wikipedia, I would provide translations of the Spanish titles (album names)
Per WP:CITE references come AFTER punctuation, and are usually at the end of a sentence or phrase See WP:CITE and WP:V
There are two fair use images and five fair use song samples - how does this meet WP:NFCC?
The Style and lyrical themes section needs more references, my rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.
The article could stand a copyedit for language - generally OK, but this needs a comma for example Instead of touring in support of WarCry[,] the band began working on new songs so that they would have a larger repertoire to perform.[2]
A model article is useful for ideas and examples to follow and there are several FAs on bands - Radiohead is one.
I would look at the failed FAC as a very detailed peer review - look at all the comments and make sure they have been addressed, treat them as examples and look for other instances too.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:31, 3 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]