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Western Front (World War I)[edit]

I've tried to expand this article into a relatively high level overview of this WWI front, and I think it now covers all the important battles and related aspects in sufficient detail. Apart from better maps, what else needs to be done to make this FA-quality? Any syntax lapses or stylistic improvements needed? Thank you. :) — RJH 19:50, 25 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

A few suggestions below. It's, overall, a very well done and informative article. Best of luck on your FAC, and Happy Holidays! (or whatever's politically correct these days)

Fixing prose. Scanning through, I caught a few typos and ambiguous sentences. "eastern europe" isn't capitalized - go through a fix typos like this. "the British air crews lost 316 aircrews to the German 114" is ambiguous - did the German lose 114 aircrews, or did the British lose to some German 114th Squadron? - clarify figures like this.

Okay, I fixed that instance. RJH

Dramatizations. There's undoubtedly been more dramatizations of WWI than just that novel; regardless, there's been several movies based off of that book in any case. What makes this one so special to be listed by itself? If you're going to list anything at all, be a little more complete and add some more content.

I added a bunch more. Probably not a complete list, but the ones that are there are among the more notable. RJH

Consequences. I know that this section is simply going to be a summary of the overall consequences article. If you're going to reference to the number of deaths from Spanish flu, isn't it notable enough to summarize in numbers the deaths and costs of fighting on the western front all in one place at the end? I understand this section is a summary, but it seems to pull a lot of random details, ignoring others, and not conclusively ending this article as a whole. -Rebelguys2 00:15, 26 December 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I did a rewrite. Hopefully that's sufficient now. I didn't want to do a comprehensive consequences of the war as that should be covered on the main WWI page. (Besides it could be an entire article onto itself.) Thanks for the feedback! — RJH 16:53, 3 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]