Wikipedia:Peer review/Write amplification/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because I am working toward FA status if at all possible. We brought this article to GA status last year and have made a few additional improvements since then. I would appreciate any feedback or comments that other editors think we need to do to make it through a FA review.
Thanks, § Music Sorter § (talk) 01:31, 31 July 2011 (UTC)
Doing... --Cryptic C62 · Talk 19:30, 16 August 2011 (UTC)
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- In the second paragraph of the lead, I have literally no idea what the numbers 1 and 0.5 refer to. Obviously there is some sort of metric for quantifying write amplification, but what kind of metric is this? Could be a percentage of some total, a ratio, or a totally arbitrary scale. Whatever the system is, it should not be used in the article until it has been fully explained.
Done - Good catch. Intro sentence modified to better define the term. Let me know if that helps.
- So write amplification is a phenomenon that represents a ratio...? I think there's too much going on the first sentence now. I've rearranged the content with this edit; let me know what you think. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 17:39, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
- I don't believe that edit results in a better description. I think you had a very good initial comment that the intro sentence does not explain what it is. Moving the clarification of it being a ratio to the second paragraph is too far away. I disagree that the edit I made had too much going on, but if you feel strongly about that I recommend we move something else from the first paragraph. Maybe we need to break it into two paragraphs, or keep the ratio in the first sentence and lets move the "undesirable phenomenon" to another spot further down. § Music Sorter § (talk) 06:22, 19 August 2011 (UTC)
- The first sentence of any article should answer the general question "What is this thing?", which I believe is adequately answered with or without the ratio information. The ratio stuff answers the question "How is this thing measured?" which, although important, does not stand out in my mind as something that needs to be shoved into the first sentence. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 19:57, 24 August 2011 (UTC)
- I don't believe that edit results in a better description. I think you had a very good initial comment that the intro sentence does not explain what it is. Moving the clarification of it being a ratio to the second paragraph is too far away. I disagree that the edit I made had too much going on, but if you feel strongly about that I recommend we move something else from the first paragraph. Maybe we need to break it into two paragraphs, or keep the ratio in the first sentence and lets move the "undesirable phenomenon" to another spot further down. § Music Sorter § (talk) 06:22, 19 August 2011 (UTC)
- So write amplification is a phenomenon that represents a ratio...? I think there's too much going on the first sentence now. I've rearranged the content with this edit; let me know what you think. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 17:39, 18 August 2011 (UTC)
- Why is Over-provisioning included in this article? It seems clear to me that this is an entirely separate topic that should have its own article. While I haven't read through the entire article yet, it seems that there are several sections that are only tangentially related to WA. I think some of these could be consolidated to paragraphs under the Factors that affect the value heading.
Done - Oops. I did not realize I left out the description of the connection to Write Amplification. § Music Sorter § (talk) 06:22, 19 August 2011 (UTC)
- The additional stuff definitely helps to clarify the relevance of the topic, but it still seems like there is a lot of superfluous detail that would be better suited to a separate article. The second paragraph in particular ("The first level of over-provisioning...") seems to be unnecessarily specific for this article. Surely there must be enough information that is specific to over-provisioning that it can stand as its own article, yes? --Cryptic C62 · Talk 19:57, 24 August 2011 (UTC)
Let me know if you find these types of comments helpful. I would be happy to continue reviewing the article. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 20:01, 16 August 2011 (UTC)
- This is great feedback. Having written much of this myself, I recognize I cannot see the forest for the trees. I believe your fresh perspective is adding great value and I would love to get more feedback. Having reviewed a number of articles for others in the past I recognize the significant time it takes to provide this feedback and I really appreciate it. Also let me know if you ever need any feedback on any articles and I would be happy to help. § Music Sorter § (talk) 06:16, 17 August 2011 (UTC)