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Albert Folch Folch[edit]

I posted this article a while ago and it's still "unreviewed" ... What does one do to get it reviewed? I'm new here ... Please let me know if it's missing something, references, etc. Please be gentle, it's my first posting.

Thanks,

Roger Purcell.

Rogerfpurcell (talk) 06:26, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there Roger. I've reviewed the article and removed the template. There are a few issues that I need to raise, and I've mentioned them over at the article. The first is the notability of the subject. Scientists must meet the criteria set out in WP:ACADEMIC in order to be eligible for inclusion. I can't find much online about his "notable awards": NSF CAREER Award, and NASA's Space Act Award; especially the latter. I've removed a lot of peacock words from the article, and lots of non-notable stuff. For example he had visiting student awards and a PhD grant listed in the "Awards and Prizes" section; they are most certainly not notable. I had to remove some stuff that didn't follow WP:SPAM. The article was saying how his work is available for sale and gave a link where to go any buy some of it. There are also some issues about neutrality. What I am going to ask you to do is

Read WP:ACADEMIC, and make sure his meets at least one of the criteria. Make sure you verify and claims using reliable third-party sources.
Go back and cut out any unnecessaraly flowery language. Take a look at WP:PEACOCK for some clues.
Take a look at WP:SPAM and make sure the article doesn't try to advertise or promote any goods or services and that there are no conflicts of interest.
Read WP:NPOV and go over the article and make sure it follows our guidelines.

If you have any problems of questions then come and ask me on my talk page; I'd be glad to help. Once you've made the changes, let me know and I'll take another look. Thanks. — Fly by Night (talk) 23:45, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Albert_Folch_Folch][edit]

I posted this article a few weeks ago and it's still "unreviewed". What does one need to do to get it reviewed? I wonder if I missed something. Also, please let me know if the article is properly written, misses references, etc. It's my first posting, so please be gentle. Thanks,

Roger. --Rogerfpurcell (talk) 06:30, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Rogerfpurcell (talk) 06:30, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like Fly by Night (talk · contribs) reviewed in the other day. WhatamIdoing (talk) 18:54, 6 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Photosynthesis system[edit]

Zoe Stanyon (talk) 08:59, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, it looks pretty good. I cleaned up a few minor things; you can see what I did in the article's history.

You have three tasks:

Add one or more categories to the very bottom of the page. See Help:Categories. When you add categories, you may remove the big "Please add some categories" banner (produced by the code that says {{Uncategorized|date=December 2010}}) and the Article Wizard cat (produced by the code that says [[Category:Articles created via the Article Wizard]]).
Please re-write the sentence that says "below you will find brief descriptions". We try not to use the word "you" in the middle of articles, because it doesn't sound very encyclopedic.
To stave off WP:Linkrot, you need to provide full bibliographic citations, not just bare URLs. Since you're citing so many scientific journals, you might like to use this tool. You paste the PMID from PubMed into the field, and it pulls all the information out of PubMed and spits out a complete citation template with all the information already filled in. All you have to do is copy and paste it in between the "ref" tags instead of the bare URL. (Of course, you can just write them out by hand, which some people think is much simpler.)

Also, you might meet some friends at WP:PLANTS if you left a message on its talk/discussion page to introduce yourself. WhatamIdoing (talk) 19:08, 6 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Vote for Students pledge[edit]

Hi, this is my first article, about the tuition fee pledge that many UK MPs signed before the election.

I'd appreciate any general feedback, or specifically some help with the questions I mentioned on the article's talk page, about bias and adding a picture.

Thanks in advance.. Hermajesty21 (talk) 14:24, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

User:Albina Bulatova/Governance and Problem Analysis Center[edit]

Would you please be so kind to view my article - is it appropriate for submission - I'm going to broaden it later and ad some images

Albina Bulatova (talk) 14:35, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mdmcshane/Enter_your_new_article_name_here[edit]

Trying to post this article, next step? Thank you

Mdmcshane (talk) 15:27, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Planbox[edit]

This is my first article. I fell in love with this company and wanted to write an article about them ( thought it was worthy) ... comments and directions are welcomed...

One of the problems is that I'm trying to have a side bar and it is not showing.

Agauthier007 (talk) 16:30, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/DynaVenture[edit]

Greetings Editors,

I would appreciate some feedback on my article on DynaVenture Corp.. The company is one of Saskatchewan's largest private companies.

Any suggestions for improvement are welcomed.

My Best,

Suzy Huber (talk) 17:24, 3 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]