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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dchiqq/DanyPen

Do you think this article has the basic information about the person? Anything else I should add or take away from the article?

Dchiqq (talk) 00:18, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

Hi Dchiqq, I had a quick read through your article, its a good start, but I have made a couple of notes

• Your citations/references - Currently the inline reference links directly out, I'm afraid that this goes against best practice guidelines (Don't worry, it took me weeks to sort out references properly when I started, and I still make the odd mistake - Sphilbrick will testify to that) Try looking at the references styles suggested here: WP:INCITE to do it properly
• Your external links section - A few tips to tidy it up, first off, I'd always start with the 'star'symbol for a bullet point ( shift button + 8 button together), then I'd open a single square bracket, paste in the URL, leave a single space, write the name of the page/article/source I'm linking to, and then close the square bracket. This will give you an External Link list that looks like: Kosei_Inoue#External_links (to see exactly how that list was done, hit the "Edit" tab opposite the header "External Links", and look at the entries in the edit interface) - I tell you what, I'll do one of them now, and you can see how it works
• The "Exhibition" section might also benefit from being a bullet-pointed list, example:

• (2008)- Canadian National Exhibition Butter Sculpting
• (2007)- Whodunnit Exhibition
• (2006)- Transit Space "Global Village"

• On the quotations, personally, I would use them far more sparingly. Perhaps instead using them to reference a certain point. However, that is just my opinion, and I am unfamiliar with Wikipedia policy in that area.

Overall, good content, the references appear to be pretty strong, and the article seems to be written from a neutral point of view (again, good). If any of what I have said did not make sense, please feel free to leave a message on my talk page. Good work Darigan (talk) 14:36, 15 November 2010 (UTC)

Also, just made an edit to your first reference in the Work section of the article, and added the appropriate tag to the References section of your article (As per suggestion above) to ensure that you have an example that you might be able to work with. Please contact me if you have any further questions, I'll try to help, and if I can't, then I might be able to point you in the directions of somebody that can. Best, Darigan (talk) 14:51, 15 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:PamelaPageInc/BrianEdwardsProducer

PamelaPageInc (talk) 03:38, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

The article has no inline citations at all at present, so it is not possible to check any of the assertions in it against a source. If the article is going to claim that Edwards has worked for named individuals, received awards from organisations, or is working on an unpublished book, these claims need references.

Some references have beeen provided, but these are bare URLs with no indication of which parts of the article they are meant to reference. Furthermore, few if any of the references cite reliable sources; most are to blogs or self-published sites like IMDB, rather than to coverage of the subject in independent books, news or magazine articles or features. See WP:CITE for more information. To establish the notability of this individual, we need evidence of significant coverage in multiple independent reliable sources.

The tone needs to be more encyclopaedic - at the moment it reads more like a promo piece or press release than an encyclopaedia article. Avoid POV terms like "award-winning", "successful", "famed".

Use Wikilinks to other articles; for example, "Grammy Award winner Donna Summer" is unnecessary; just link to the article Donna Summer where all her awards and achievements are listed. Karenjc 19:30, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Markgarret/Methark_Technology

I think i was very specific on the article. Puted reliable sources and more.

Mark Garret 03:59, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

I think the best way to display your references correctly is by using inline citations, so try and use those if you can. Also, I think you need to find more references from third-party sources, as at the moment it mainly relies on the official site, which is not really considered a reliable source. Chevymontecarlo 21:30, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Chase_Patrick/Richard_Chase

This is an entry for Richard Chase, a renowned specialist in service operations management with an extensive bibliography of books and articles, as well as honors/awards that support his reputation a leader and visionary in the field.

Chase Patrick (talk) 08:14, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

The article appears to be a WP:AFC request, and so it should be reviewed there for you and either accepted (moved into the mainspace) or rejected/put on hold with some suggestions for improvement. This should happen within a few days or so, although at the moment there is a backlog, so please be patient. I hope you understand. Chevymontecarlo 21:27, 18 November 2010 (UTC)

Alberto Terrile

hello all,

after 2 months, got no feedback at all; I believe my article has the right citations and all. could someone have a look at it?

thank you, Claudio Castellini

93.104.177.119 (talk) 19:31, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

First, apologies for failure to provide feedback when you first requested. We are struggling to keep this forum adequately staffed, and one of our more prolific contributors took a break shortly before your request.

• Overall, the article looks quite good, especially for a new editor
• I removed the unreviewed template
• There are some questions about proper permission for the photographs (which are excellent). I've asked another expert to weigh in, and there will be some requests on the images themselves. If you have any questions about how to address these, don't hesitate to ask.
• You have quite a few references, the usual shortcoming of new editors, but as many as you have, there need to be more. Much of the material is quite interesting, but begs the question of the source. For example, the opening paragraph of the biography section contains a number of acts, none of which appear to be referenced.
• Similarly, the middle two paragraphs of the "Experimental works; teaching" section are quite interesting, but I don't see the source of the information.--SPhilbrickT 19:56, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

hello Sphilbrick, thanks for the review.

• yes, the IP is mine - I realised I hadn't logged in after posting the request
• the author of the pictures, Alberto Terrile himself, has just sent an email statement to the other reviewer, I hope that is ok; I will contact the reviewer himself in case something is missing/wrong
• I will be adding references, then pinging you again.

thank you, claudio castellini (talk) 08:58, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Christian_Compassion_Ministries

Hoping there are enough reliable sources here to show the articles eligibility.

Please could someone have a quick check of this brief but accurate article on this charity, so it can be verified?

thanks very much! Jtsparrow (talk) 22:56, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

You need to try and add some names to those references, if you can, like this:

<ref>[http://www.example.com|reference name goes here!]</ref>

I do think you need to add more references that are from third-party sources; i.e. sources that are not affiliated with the article's subject. Chevymontecarlo 06:53, 16 November 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Maccab/BethRaymer

I want to insert wikilinks--but where? I want to insert a picture--but how? I just opened my account. DO I have to wait four days to do these things?

Maccab (talk) 02:05, 15 November 2010 (UTC)

Anyone can add Wikilinks to an article. Wikilinks, if you didn't know, are links to other Wikipedia articles, and can be added by placing [[ ]] around the name of the article you want to link to, for example:

I just ate an [[apple]].

I hope you understand. As to adding pictures, I don't really know that much about that to be helpful, so I recommend that you ask at the help desk. You don't have to wait four days to do either of these things. The article is a good first draft, but I do think you need to use inline citations to display your references correctly; and also try and add some descriptive names to them as well, so a reader has some idea of what the reference is about. Here is an example:

<ref>[http://www.google.com|Reference name goes here!]</ref>

Finally, the last suggestion I have is that you might want to add an infobox as well. I hope this is all useful feedback! Chevymontecarlo 06:49, 16 November 2010 (UTC)