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Terreform ONE[edit]

Please review this new article "Terreform ONE" and merge it with another title "Terreform". Both terms are acceptable to be combined. Thank u.


MITclubfact (talk) 01:44, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

the august[edit]

I have included the references to articles by the Chicago Tribune. What are other suggestions to get the article more reliable?


The August (talk) 04:33, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Verified Audit Circulation[edit]

Hello, I would like to request a review of this new article about the U.S. company Verified Audit Circulation, which I believe meets the criteria for noteability and for third-party references. Ideally, the "new article" tag can then be removed. Thanks!

Seandalytx (talk) 15:09, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Venkatesh_TH/Basics_about_DATA_MINING[edit]

Venkatesh TH (talk) 15:35, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Davina.R[edit]

Please help me with this article. Thank you.

I need assistance with:

  1. The 1st line (the introduction)
  2. 'Fashion Entrepreneurship' - is it ok?
  3. 'Style' - is it too long? Is it too many references?

Thank you.

Davina Reichman' is an Australian Fashion Entrepreneur. She has a "fashion/marketing portfolio with a presence that has had international coverage".[1]

 Done See: Wikipedia:Requests_for_feedback/2011_August_22#User:Davina.R

Fashion Entrepreneurship[edit]

Davina founded and is the Managing Director of iClothing[2] which is iPad compatible clothing t-shirts and dresses with kangaroo pouches store iPads inand the annual Being Born Again Couture Fashion Show[3], a couture show in different cities globally with renowned and emerging fashion designers and artists creating a haute couture garment each with music, theatrical performances, dancing and film.

The inaugural show in 2010 in Sydney, Australia show collaborated Australian fashion designers including Akira Isogawa[4], Nicola Finetti[5], Marnie Skillings[6] and Michael Lo Sordo[7] and Australian artists including Tracey Moffatt[8], Lindy Lee[9] and Christopher Horder[10].

The 2011 show in New York City, Manhattan, features fashion designers including BCBC Max Azria, Calvin Klein, Anna Sui, Donna Karan, Michael Kors collaborating with artists from MoMA and P.S.1. including Michele Abeles and Tauba Auerbach[11].

Style[edit]

"High-fashion and experimental, Davina's sense of personal style can only be described as eclectic"[12]. Davina creates "styles that are whimsical, contradictory, yet confident with appealing feminine aesthetics", according to her 'D&Em by Davina' label [13]. The focus is on "the crazy, yet the beautiful; the obsessive, yet the controlled"[14].

Davina was interviewed by Fashion_One TV[15] and NDTV China[16] during Australian Fashion Week. In addition, Davina was interviewed by ABC_News_(USA) and Fashion.Maga-Zine.com for her PR and Event Director position at Couture Fashion Week in New York City in 2011, her iClothing iPad clothing range and assisting famous and emerging fashion talents develop [17] [18]. Domenico.y (talk) 16:03, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/TelePacific_Communications[edit]

The article is about a telecommunications company TelePacific Communications. I just need someone to verify that everything makes sense.


Authorrob (talk) 16:37, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:204.65.230.115/Paul_S._Victor_"Swan"[edit]

Is the reading good enough to be published, thank you.


Tron621 (talk) 16:55, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • No. The lead section is HUGE, and the sections are TINY. You need to move some most of the lead text into bigger sections, then create a lead that summarises the article. See: WP:LEAD Ma®©usBritish [talk] 12:46, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Ladaycia/Margravine Cemetery[edit]

First article here... any suggestions/comments? Thank you in advance.


Ladaycia (talk) 17:29, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Article does not appear to be complete - would recommend you request RFF again, once you deem the article finished. Thanks, Ma®©usBritish [talk] 12:59, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Miccosukee_Volunteer_Fire-Rescue[edit]

I'm trying to add useful information about my local community to Wikipedia. I'm trying to get a handle on what articles are appropriate and which are not. Where does this one sit on the useful/not useful scale??

Thanks, Dave

Tallycast (talk) 18:30, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Useful is determined by notability. See: WP:NOTABILITY for in-depth explanations on what is notable, and how to write an article that can be verified and considered notable enough to be on Wiki. Thanks, Ma®©usBritish [talk] 13:09, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Francis Jeremiah Connell[edit]

I am requesting the article at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Francis_Jeremiah_Connell be reviewed. Francis J. Connell was a Roman Catholic priest and theologian who taught for many years at The Catholic University of America in Washington, DC. He is the author of numerous works and is well-respected for his scholarship. The article is my own original contribution based on several third party sources. Thank you.

Emmo827 (talk) 18:42, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

MTB444/Jan Nickman[edit]

Many of the online articles I would like to cite as sources for this subject MTB444/Jan Nickman are archived with various news agencies, which charge a fee to read the entire article. Should I link to these fee based articles? I also have the original hard copies. What would be the best practice/method for citing in this case? Link to the fee based articles or simply provide name/date of cited source publication?

Any other feedback is much appreciated.

MTB444 (talk) 19:13, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Blarrib/Alice Brown Chittenden[edit]

I have added some better citations to this. All but one are now images of the original source material. The image of the San Francisco Call article is too poor to be readable directly, so I have transcribed it.

Thanks - Bob Larribeau Blarrib (talk) 20:06, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Blarrib (talk) 20:06, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Posterolateral knee injuries[edit]

I would like to have my article reviewed. It is a piece describing the anatomy of the posterolateral corner of the knee as well as descriptions of common injuries and current treatment modalitites. Please let me know if further information is needed.


Cmpierce2 (talk) 20:31, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:A1goodidea/Jeffrey todd smith[edit]

A1goodidea (talk) 21:32, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Santa Monica Public Library[edit]

Article describes the Santa Monica Public Library through its history to the present day. I have endeavored to follow Wikipedia's p's and q's. As this is my first article, I welcome editorial input.

SMPL Reference (talk) 22:00, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/TelePacific_Communications[edit]

Authorrob (talk) 22:20, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Irene Ferguson[edit]

Hello, please can I have some feedback on the article on Irene Ferguson, and confirmation that my sources are reliable etc?


122.59.241.192 (talk) 23:11, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vidxx788/455_The_Fans[edit]

Just want alittle look over my first article

Vidxx788 (talk) 23:46, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Mya-Moe Ukuleles[edit]

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http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mya-Moe_Ukuleles[edit]

+ The "Mya-Moe Ukuleles" article is my first in Wikipedia, and I just wanted to be sure it is suitable for the live version of the encyclopedia. As time permits, I do hope to expand this article. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Epoire (talk) 04:43, 18 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  1. ^ Lawson, Lena, Fashion.maga-zine, "Fashion Inspired By Innovation: Australian designer, producer & fashionista Davina Reichman is all about helping young fashion talents emerge & develop: NYC fashion shows, celebs & magazines, May 2011, New York City
  2. ^ "iClothing", iClothing, 7 January 2010
  3. ^ "About the Being Born Again Couture fashion show", Being Born Again Couture Fashion Show, 21 August 2009
  4. ^ Akira Isogawa, "Akira Isogawa Biography", Akira Isogawa Biography
  5. ^ Nicola Finetti, "Nicola Finetti Website", Nicola Finetti Website
  6. ^ Marnie Skillings, "Marnie Skillings Website", Marnie Skillings Website
  7. ^ Michael Lo Sordo, "Michael Lo Sordo Website", Michael Lo Sordo Website
  8. ^ Tracy Mofatt, "Tracy Moffatt, Roslynoxley9 Artist Profile", Tracy Mofatt, Roslynoxley9 Artist Profile
  9. ^ Lindy Lee,"Lindy Lee, Roslynoxley9 Artist Profile", Lindy Lee, Roslynoxley9 Artist Profile
  10. ^ Christopher Horder, "Christopher Horder, Liverpool Street Gallery Artist Profile", Christopher Horder, Liverpool Street Gallery Artist Profile
  11. ^ Being Born Again Couture Fashion Show, "Being Born Again Couture Fashion Show", Being Born Again Couture Fashion Show
  12. ^ Davina Reichman, "Davina Reichman, Biography", Davina Reichman Biography
  13. ^ D&Em by Davina Label, Being Born Again Couture, http://www.beingbornagain.net/buttons/D_andEm_Label.html], D&Em by Davina Label, Being Born Again Couture, 19 January 2009
  14. ^ D&Em Label - Being Born Again Couture, http://www.beingbornagain.net/buttons/D_andEm_Label.html], D&Em by Davina Label - Being Born Again Couture, 19 January 2009
  15. ^ Fashion ONE TV, "Ms Reichman interviewed by Fashion One TV by Lynsay at Australian Fashion Week", Ms Reichman interviewed by Fashion One TV by Lynsay, Australian Fashion Week, May 2009
  16. ^ NDTV, "Ms Reichman interviewed by NDTV, Fashion Week Around The World (Australian Fashion Week)", Ms Reichman interviewed by NDTV, Fashion Week Around The World (Australian Fashion Week), May 2009
  17. ^ Lawson, Lena, Fashion.maga-zine,"Fashion Inspired By Innovation: Davina Reichman’s iPad Clothing Range", May 2011, New York City
  18. ^ Lawson, Lena, Fashion.maga-zine, "Fashion Inspired By Innovation: Australian designer, producer & fashionista Davina Reichman is all about helping young fashion talents emerge & develop: NYC fashion shows, celebs & magazines,", May 2011, New York City
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