Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Amy Diamond

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Amy Diamond[edit]

First, as a non-native English speaker, I'd like someone to read through the article and comment on the language. Secondly, as I have re-written most of the article, I want to ask senior Wikipedians advice on how to proceed with it. Should I add more info on some areas? My ambition wants to seek a GA or A status, but is it sensible as she is still active and releasing a new album? Moorvis 18:41, 17 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Nswinton[edit]

I fixed one minor typo, but this article is honestly in very good shape. I'd suggest you nominate it for GA. Mandy Moore was recently a FA, and she's still active in acting and music, so I don't think her future career would cause any trouble. Nswinton 21:28, 26 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

  • Indeed, the language needs work. The article should be copy-edited by a native English speaker. You can file a copy-editing application in Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors. In the lead for instance, there is no variety of expression (you repeat the same forms of expression and words like "Sweden", "hit" etc.).
  • We do not wikilink single years (2005). Only date-month-year (e.g. January 1, 2005). Check WP:MoS.
  • It is not nice to have so many citations in a row. Maybe you could combine them per Tourette syndrome or Actions along the Matanikau.
  • I know she is too young, and the biography cannot be long enough. But any possible expansion and addition of information would be welcome.
  • "This Is Me Now" and "This Is Me Now" are not part of her biography. Maybe you should create a new section, in which to incorporate these sub-sections under "Career" or "Hits" or something similar.
  • "The third album" is stubby. Could you expand it a bit?
  • Are there any critics' comments about her talent, her voice, her future maybe as an artist?
  • I am afraid that the images should be removed from the discography (See WP:MUSTARD#Discographies, Wikipedia:Non-free_content#Images, WP:FUC #3 and 8, and Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style_(lists_of_works)#Discographies).
  • The fact she is active is no problem for GA or A-Class Biography project nomination. You will have of course to update the article when something new happens.--Yannismarou 10:46, 27 April 2007 (UTC)[reply]