Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Calogero Vizzini
Calogero Vizzini[edit]
Just wondering how the article would be assessed. - Mafia Expert 19:34, 22 May 2007 (UTC)
Yannismarou[edit]
- "In the media he was often depicted as the "boss of bosses" – although such a position does not exist in the loose structure of the Mafia, and later Mafia turncoats denied Vizzini ever was the boss of the Mafia in Sicily." A bit repetitive the prose here, don't you think?
- I see a quite long short in the lead. I do not think if this is compatible with the lead's role as summary of the article. Check WP:LEAD.
- In general, maybe the lead should be rewritten, so as to get a proper thematic and stylistic (proper paragraphs) structure.
- Try not to have uncited paragraphs.
- "Mafia in Villalba" is a mixture of assessments about the mafia and Vizzini. The latter IMO could be placed after Vizzini's biography in an "assessment" section. The first one could constitute an introduction in the biography sections (the first one is "early years").
- I think the article is under-wikified; it could have more links to Wikipedia articles (e.g. Catholic Church).
- I think that per WP:MoS you should not use italics, when you quote.
- "In the middle of the start of the Cold War, the 1948 elections were a triumph for the Christian Democrats, who would govern Italy for the next 45 years." Too simplistic. They were not governing alone, and the Italian politics during these 45 years had many ups and downs.
I rated the article as B, although I am not still sure about my voting! Some sections have no citations. I think there could be further improvements in terms of content, referencing, structure.--Yannismarou 17:18, 30 May 2007 (UTC)