Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Charles Edward Magoon
Charles Edward Magoon[edit]
I'm looking to improve the quality of my contributions to Wikipedia with more inline sourcing and more closely following the Biography guidelines. A review of this article will give me pointers that I can put towards other work, but I'd also like to eventually make it my first "GA". JRP 23:39, 5 December 2006 (UTC)
Yannismarou[edit]
The article is well-written and well-referenced. I think it will easily go through GA and it can stand in FAC. Some minor remarks:
- Check carefully the prose and, if necessary, ask for an external copy-editing. I saw that another reviewer in the talk page of the article has done some accurate remarks concerning prose.
- "Death and afterward" is tooooo stubby, and the heading is inaccurate. We have the "death", but what about the "afterward"?!!
- I see you have a variety of printed sources; all of his era. Well-researched indeed! But If I was the editor of this article, I would also like to have some more modern analysis and assessments about the controversial events you point out and his tenure as Governor. In this way, you could enrich the article and make the research even more comprehensive.
- Minor: Alphabetize categories at the end of the article.--Yannismarou 08:48, 6 December 2006 (UTC)
- I've made some changes based on your suggestions. First, some copy-editing (though since it's my work, I should find someone else to do it). I also alphabetized the cats and reworked the stubby section. I don't yet have more recent resources, though I am working on that. Another editor on the talk page indicates that he may be able to help in that department also. How does these changes look so far? JRP 06:40, 14 December 2006 (UTC)
- The article was and remains good. The sources I propose will just add a beeter variety and maybe some additional assessments. I'm sorry I cannot ce the article myself! I'm not a native English speaker, and I'm afraid that as far as the prose is concerned, I cannot help a lot. But there are some excellent copy-editors around, who could help you with the (minor I think) prose problems.--Yannismarou 19:06, 18 December 2006 (UTC)
- I've made some changes based on your suggestions. First, some copy-editing (though since it's my work, I should find someone else to do it). I also alphabetized the cats and reworked the stubby section. I don't yet have more recent resources, though I am working on that. Another editor on the talk page indicates that he may be able to help in that department also. How does these changes look so far? JRP 06:40, 14 December 2006 (UTC)