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Francis II, Holy Roman Emperor[edit]

I've spent several hours over the last few days expanding and referencing this article. It was assessed as B-Class yesterday before added references, some pictures and templates - aiming to give a good overall picture of a significant figure in European history. I'm hoping to get it to Good Article status. Lec CRP1 13:40, 5 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

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Review by DrKiernan[edit]

Once again, you've managed to make a substantial improvement in a short space of time!

  • I've amended the footnote placements, but the single years without accompanying dates should be unlinked, according to the Manual of Style.
  • "The federal Diet..." is a short paragraph, can it be expanded or integrated?
  • "Francis was a son..." maybe put this at the start of the early life section, with the birth details?
  • "where many died in the conditions" sounds a little strange, I think I would prefer "where many died" (which I suppose might be misleading as to cause of death) or "where many died in the poor conditions".
  • Personally, I'd move the "Marriages" section to between the "Early life" and "Emperor" sections. Also, note the redlinked years that need to be unlinked.

As you know, one or two sources might not be considered sufficient for a major figure, and the article is shorter at 22 kb than the articles on British rulers, which may indicate room for even further expansion, if you wanted to aim higher than GA. DrKiernan 09:46, 19 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]