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Grand Duchess Anastasia Nikolaevna of Russia[edit]

I'd like to bring the quality of this article up to featured article status. The subject of the article is fairly significant. I attempted to add references and sources, but considerable work still needs to be done. Please offer any suggestions to improve the article. Also look at the images included with the article to see if they are appropriate and included within the public domain. --Bookworm857158367 05:55, 6 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

Well-researched article and worked with devotion by its editor. My main problem is that sometimes the wording and the structuring become uncyclopedic. This is my review:

  • "Robert K. Massie, The Romanovs: The Final Chapter, 1995 ISBN 0-6794-3572-7". Page is missing here.
  • "Gilliard, Pierre (1970). "Thirteen Years at the Russian Court", Ayer Company Publishers Incorporated, ISBN 0-4050-3029-0" Page is also missing here.
  • "Dehn, Lili, 1922. "The Real Tsaritsa", ISBN 5-3000-2285-3". And here!
  • "Kurth, Anastasia: The Riddle of Anna Anderson, 1983." And here!!
  • Cite properly the external link in note 15. Check also Template:Cite web.
  • "But the unwelcome girl made herself noticed from the start with the vividness of her personality." Such assessments need citing. In any case, be careful with such wordings, so that you are not accused of POV.
  • "Those who knew her remembered Anastasia as a vivacious and energetic young girl. " Those who knew her? Who knew her?! I think sometimes the writing gets uncyclopedic.
  • "She was reportedly good at wicked impersonations of those around her, and possessed a sharp wit and appreciation for sarcastic jokes." Veribiable source is needed here.
  • "(She) was very roguish ... her mother's friend Anna Vyrubova. [7]" This paragraph has so many quotes that I think the prose gets a bit problematic.
  • Do not link sigle years like 1911; only full dates like May 2, 1911. Per WP:MoS.
  • Get rid of "Older namesakes". If you want create a disambiguation page, but the place of this section is not in the article.
  • Get also rid of "Trivia". Try to incorparate its content somewhere else in the prose. As it is now, it is stubby and trivia! Trivia sections are no more recommended.
  • The first three paragraphs of "From Mystery to Legend" are uncited. Try to have at least one inline citation in each paragraph.
  • "Historians have always assumed that Anastasia was murdered along with her father and the rest of her family during the early morning hours". If you do not cite, words like "historians" are weasel. What are your sources?
  • "Historians have ... superiors after the execution". This paragraph looks to me like a repetition. You have already told us about her execution in the previous section. Do you have anything new to add? The next paragraph is again about her execution. Thinking again, I wonder if you would like to create a seperate section about her execution just before "From Mystery to Legend". In this way, I think you would avoid a sense of repetition and going back to something you have already described (In the current article, you tell the story of her execution, after you close her biography with her death).
  • Do not repeat the same wikilinks. Anna Anderson is linked more than once for no obvious reason.
  • "DNA testing confirmed these were the remains of the Imperial Family and their servants, although the fate of the two missing children remains a mystery." Avoid stubby paragraphs like this one.
  • "low-key fanfare"? Can you explain this term?
  • I do not think you should analyze with so many details Anastasia (1997 film). After all there is a seperate article.--Yannismarou 20:44, 12 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Bookworm857158367[edit]

Thanks for reviewing the article. I've made most of the changes suggested. Three of the books are actually on-line, so I couldn't list page numbers that aren't shown. One of the other editors must have looked up publication information for the print editions that I don't have. I changed the citation to go along with an on-line edition. I will wait to nominate it for a GA review until I find out the status of one of the photos. I'm not sure if the Beinecke Library permits its use. Any other suggestions?--Bookworm857158367 05:56, 13 December 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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