Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Humbert Roque Versace

Humbert Roque Versace[edit]

The editors would like for the group to make comments on areas that need improvement and any ideals for expansion.--Oldwildbill 18:35, 29 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

The prose looks to me fine, but, since I'm not a native English speaker, I'll let such judgements to other users. My remarks have to do with the structural problems the article has:

I understand you want to make it FA. Then, according to my opinion, it is small. You have to expand it. I see that you have only one section: "Biography". You have to expand it with more information and divide it in further sections.
Taking into consideration the current length of the article, tha quote in section "Medal of Honor citation" seems to me huuuuuge. I also donot like the fact that this section has no prose.
Section "Awards and decorations": No prose. Not recommended. And you must mention in this section the years of the awards.
Section "In memory": Looks like a "trivia" section, which are no further recommended for FA. In general, there is a problem with these three sections:"Medal of Honor citation", "Awards and decorations", "In memory". Maybe you can rewrite them, add more prose or create one section with a better article flow. In this case the quote might also be OK. But I'm still wondering it if we need it all.
Inline citations go exactly after the punctuation. Do not leave a gap. I corrected two cases I saw and I think all your inline citations are now OK.--Yannismarou 14:38, 31 August 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Plange[edit]

The only comment I would make is that the Awards section should be removed from the body since it is already in the infobox. --plange 01:32, 9 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]