Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Jane Elizabeth Hodgson

Jane Elizabeth Hodgson

Comments on this article will be appreciated to get rating and maybe GA status. Regards—G716 <^T·_C> 05:04, 7 June 2008 (UTC)

Yannismarou

• I'd create a two-paragraphs lead (one paragraph summary of career; one paragraph summary of the abortiond issue), gathering in the second one all the information related to the abortion issue, because right now the convictions, her interest on the issue etc. are a bit scattered.
• Any material for her life before 1934?
• "Education and Career" looks to me a bit one-sided. You know, I am also pro-abortions, but I want also to hear the altera pars! What do her critics have to say about? As in the lead, you can dedicate a section of the main article to the abortions issue, telling the whole history of the debate about her activities (with sub-sections such as the existing court-cases sub-sections or a "critics" sections etc. - if you go through other articles about controversial figures, you'll often find a "critics" section).
• Get rid of the "see also" section, incorporating the link in the main text.

Well-written, try to enrich it with more material not necessarily focused on the abortions (any other interesting aspects of her activity), and make it less one-sided; I'm afraid that POV is the article's main problem right now.--Yannismarou (talk) 11:33, 18 June 2008 (UTC)