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Article promoted by Ian Rose (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 06:04, 14 August 2017 (UTC) « Return to A-Class review list[reply]

Cho Ki-chon[edit]

Nominator(s): Finnusertop (talk)

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When Cho Ki-chon – a Soviet propaganda officer of Korean descent – entered his home country with the Red Army during the last days of WWII, he had a mission. The Soviets needed to groom Kim Il-sung for leadership of North Korea, but the man seriously lacked appeal. The Soviets figured out that with the help of Cho, they could kill two birds with one stone: write brilliant propaganda praising Kim as the hero of Koreans but do so in the socialist realist genre. Thus was born Mt. Paektu, an epic poem chronicling the largely made-up guerilla activities of Kim Il-sung to serve as the basis of his cult of personality. A few years later, Kim led Koreans to war again and Cho continued to write propaganda poems with names like "Aircraft Hunters" and "Mungyong Pass". Cho died in a United Nations Force bombing raid. Ironically, his death in "The Forgotten War" was what immortalized his legacy; he died just before Kim Il-sung began his sweeping purges of the intelligentsia in the mid-1950s.

The article is a GA and DYK. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 20:29, 8 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Lingzhi[edit]

  • "may have spared him his reputation" spared from what negative assessment?  Lingzhi ♦ (talk) 09:31, 9 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Lingzhi: would you be happy with the wording I added in this edit:

"may have spared him his reputation from that loss of official recognition. With the exception of a period in the 1970s when Cho's name was barely mentioned in official publications, his legacy has benefited from continued popularity in North Korea."

? – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 18:20, 10 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Lingzhi: What about you? Are you happy with the article after the improvements below (and those done by you; thank you for that)? – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 03:12, 7 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorta stepping away from doing any content review at the moment. I hope things go well for you A-class review... sorry...  Lingzhi ♦ (talk) 22:40, 8 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by DarjeelingTea[edit]

Conditional Support - This is an absolutely fascinating article by Finnusertop. Having just, this last summer, been promoted to GA status there's not a lot that I can find that needs improvement but I have listed some items below. I've rated this "conditional support" on correction of these items.

  • Alt tags for images are all present, captions are sensible and supported by text, images all have correct licensing
  • No DAB issues or dead external links
  • Earwig shows copyvio unlikely
  • Everything is cited and to RS
  • LEDE complies with WP:LEDE for length
  • "Other poems by hum include" ... is that supposed to be "him"?
  • about the sufferings of Koreans ... I believe "suffering" should be singular
  • Yi Chang-ju of the North Research Institution, ... there should not be a comma after "institution"
  • " According to Gabroussenko," ... while this form is fine for the literature review of a thesis, I don't think in an encyclopedia we can just say "according to [surname]" without giving the given name on the first instance of use
  • By that time, he had much experience of Soviet literature and literature administration. (I think the preposition used here should be "with" instead of "of" - and a word like "substantial" might by stylistically preferable to "much"?)
  • Several times we refer to United Nations bombing raids and, while technically that's correct, I don't see this specific verbiage used often in lieu of naming a specific nationality's air force.
  • Cho died on 31 July 1951 in his office room - couldn't we just say in his office ... or did he also live there?

DarjeelingTea (talk) 03:24, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the great suggestions, DarjeelingTea. I've made all changes in this edit.
Notice that I didn't spell out Gabroussenko's first name where you point out it's missing. I've already introduced her with her full name when I first invoke her in the section #Before emigrating from the Soviet Union:

"Tatiana Gabroussenko thinks it is probable that"

as well as in the first footnote

"According to Tatiana Gabroussenko, Cho's place of birth"

. If you think it would be wise to spell it out once more, I can do that of course. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 04:15, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for pointing that out, I missed it! That all looks good to me in that case. DarjeelingTea (talk) 06:15, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
For the Milhist coords, this review is by a confirmed sock who has been blocked indefinitely. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 12:06, 11 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Peacemaker67: Ack, seen, unfortunate situation. Question is, do we simply ignore the review (and require three more for promotion), or do we let it stand? From what I can see, the comments seem reasonable, and have been addressed, so I don't think the nominator should be penalised. Thoughts? AustralianRupert (talk) 08:57, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I think Finnusertop has addressed them in good faith, but I just wanted to point it out for those that don't run the script that shows blocked users. It is only a conditional support, so I'd ordinarily want to see a couple of strong supports (or three supports) to get this one over the line. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:38, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
No worries, thanks for letting us know. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:49, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AustralianRupert[edit]

Support: G'day, nicely done, IMO, although I can honestly say this isn't a topic I know anything about. I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 10:49, 12 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Tatiana Gabroussenko thinks it is...". Suggest on first mention clarifying who Gabroussenko is. For instance, "Biographer Tatiana Gabroussenko", or "Author Tatiana Gabroussenko..."
    •  Done
  • "literary circles of the time were divided based on divisions" --> "literary circles of the time were based on divisions"
    •  Done
  • grammar: "These influence include..."
    •  Done
  • "heroic guerilla who is well-suited to lead the country" --> "heroic guerilla well-suited to lead the country"
    •  Done
  • "naivity" --> "naivety"
    •  Done
  • "than Kim Il-sung — such as Ch'ŏl-ho, Kkot-pun, and Sŏk-jun — and by extension": the emdashes should be unspaced here, or should be replaced with spaced endashes. As you use spaced endashes earlier, I'd suggest changing to this style here for consistency;
    •  Done
  • you use a short citation system for Gabroussenko 2005, but not for other works such as Myers 2011, Myers 2015, Dae-Sook Suh 1981, or Gobroussenko 2010 (there are a few others, I think, this is not exhaustive). This should probably be consistent;
    • The style I use is short citations whenever I cite multiple locations (i.e. pages) of the same work. If I only cite one page from a book, I will present the long citation straight away without a short citation.
      • No worries, seems fair enough. I think a couple of editors use this style also, although on first glance it appears inconsistent to me. Definitely not a warstopper, though. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 09:37, 15 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • not sure about the punctuation here: "[A Study on Long Epic Poetry Titled 『Mt. Baekdu』 – Focusing on Creative Intention –]" --> "[A Study on Long Epic Poetry Titled "Mt. Baekdu" – Focusing on Creative Intention]"?

 Done

  • the infobox mentions a few things that aren't in the article, which probably should be: the prizes, his marriage/child etc.
    •  Done. Added the marriage and child. The prizes were already there.
Thank you for the suggestions, AustralianRupert. I have tried to answer them above to the best of my ability. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 21:55, 14 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]
This review is probably close to being able to be successfully closed. It probably just needs an image review. Unfortunately, I'm probably not in a position to review these images. @Nikkimaria: would you mind taking a look at the images in this article? Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:30, 21 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Support: Comments: (while the title will be useful, it should not hold up A-class) Some really minor things...

  • "there amplified his Russian and Soviet sides.[16] He returned to the Far East and" - suggest putting a paragraph split here.
    •  Done
  • "reluctant to visit places of work.[22] His role in shaping North" - and here
    •  Done
  • "These very works" - drop the "very"
    •  Done
  • "Cho released a novel" - do we know the name of it?
    • Not sure. The sources I cite for the novel (English language abstracts of Korean journal articles) don't mention it. I'll have to look if some of those actual articles do. I didn't find this information in the English language sources that I use in the article. I'll need to investigate this.
  • "While still at the Pedagogical Institute, Cho released a novel. The novel describes anti-Japanese armed struggle,[3] and is similar" - perhaps "While still at the Pedagogical Institute, Cho released a novel describing the anti-Japanese armed struggle. It is similar..."
    •  Done

That's about it! Maury Markowitz (talk) 19:24, 12 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your suggestions, Maury Markowitz. I've implemented the easy fixes. As for the name of the novel Cho wrote in the Soviet Union, I'll have to dig deeper. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 20:05, 14 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

  • File:Mosaic_Depicting_Kim_Il_Sungs_Homecoming,_Pyongyang,_North_Korea_(2907648510).jpg: typically 2D works like mosaics or murals do not garner a copyright for the photographer. Nikkimaria (talk) 02:24, 22 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
 Done @Nikkimaria: dropped the cc-by-2.0 tag. – Finnusertop (talk ⋅ contribs) 20:52, 29 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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