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Nguyen Van Nhung[edit]
- Review extended until 21:00, 17 June 2008 (UTC) to garner further comment. Eurocopter (talk) 21:14, 14 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Hello again! My first visit for almost five months. This is probably pushing it a bit, but at 5.5k of prose (Tent pegging is 4.3k), it is all that exists on the subject. Captain Nguyen Van Nhung was the bodyguard of General Duong Van Minh, who deposed President Ngo Dinh Diem of South Vietnam in a military coup. Nhung's notability is solely derived from his actions as Minh's bodyguard - this amounts to executing Diem, his brother Ngo Dinh Nhu and the Army of the Republic of Vietnam Special Forces head and deputy, Colonel Le Quang Tung and Major Le Quang Trieu. All four executions are described to the maximum available extent, as is the assassination of Nhung himself. So, this is an exhaustive account of Nhung's activities, the other parts of his life and military career are not known at all, from my search of 15+ books of the Diem downfall. I guess this is a test case to see if things like this are too short. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 08:36, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
A few comments (on request)
- "he known for his role" - missing word?
- 'Fixed. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- No photo of Nguyen Van Nhung I take it?
- No. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- "a coup led by a group of ARVN generals" - what's ARVN?
- Fixed. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- "Tung shouted "Remember who gave you your stars!"[3][2][4]" - put the refs in numerical order (some FAC guys are picky on this).
- Fixed. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- "into a jeep and driven to edge of the air base" - perhaps "and drove them over the edge..." (check the sentence as a whole)
- Copyedited. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- There are some sections where it really talks about Nhung very little... more about the overall operation or the actions of others (eg. Minh).
- Yes, to give background on the assassinations, and to be frank, a bit of padding wouldn't really hurt in such an article. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:27, 11 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
giggy (:O) 10:17, 10 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Understood. Is there any background information on the subject's life before becoming a military officer? If not, I can't see any real reservations about the article, although I might expand the lead a little. John Carter (talk) 01:52, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Unfortunately, there's no information apart from the four shootings that he did, and the shooting of himself. I'm not really sure what I can do in the lead...unless I should describe some of the gory details? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 01:58, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Scraped out a few more generalities for the lead. Blnguyen (bananabucket) 02:06, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Unfortunately, there's no information apart from the four shootings that he did, and the shooting of himself. I'm not really sure what I can do in the lead...unless I should describe some of the gory details? Blnguyen (bananabucket) 01:58, 13 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Support. Even if it's a very short article, it meets all criteria in my opinion. --Eurocopter (talk) 21:17, 14 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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