Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Aleksandr Vasilevsky

Add links
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

Aleksandr Vasilevsky[edit]

A biography of one of the greatest Soviet WWII commanders, that was reduced to stubiness so far. I rewrote the article and now would like to hear your opinion :)) -- Grafikm (AutoGRAF) 12:48, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin[edit]

It's much better than it was before! Still, a number of formatting and stylistic point that probably need to be looked at:

  • Lots of copyediting. In particular:
    • Unexpected switches in tense (e.g. "Vasilevsky was again conscripted" versus "Later that year, Vasilevsky becomes commander").
    • Strange or ambiguous word choice (e.g. "Vasilevsky was affected to several reserve regiments", "Vasilevsky fought with various anti-Soviet paramilitary groups in Belarus", "topping his military career, Vasilevsky was appoined").
    • Lots of occasional spelling mistakes. It might be worthwhile to run this text through a spellchecker and see what it flags.
  • "Personality and contemporary opinion": "contemporary", in this context, would refer to the opinions of people living at the same time as he was. The section seems to focus primarily on modern historical opinion, so it should probably be retitled.
  • "Bibliography" has been deprecated as a section title for some time now. I'm not sure if it's supposed to be "References" or "Further reading" here, though.
  • The infobox should probably mention that his allegiance prior to the revolution would have been to Imperial Russia.
  • There's a strange gap at the end of the "Post-WWII" section; and it should probably be retitled to avoid the abbreviation.

These are just minor issues, though; overall, it's a great article! Kirill Lokshin 16:21, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice work! Kirill Lokshin 17:56, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Wait I haven't finished copyed yet... :) -- Grafikm (AutoGRAF) 17:57, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I have every confidence you'll get through it at this point ;-) Kirill Lokshin 17:58, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
OK I'm finished now. You're welcome to have a second look Kirill :)) -- Grafikm (AutoGRAF) 18:31, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
The copyedit seems to have fixed all the more-or-less obvious issues. There are probably some places in the text where the style and wording could be tightened up; but I'm sure the nice people at FAC will be happy to point those out if they see them ;-) Kirill Lokshin 18:57, 9 July 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:WikiProject_Military_history/Peer_review/Aleksandr_Vasilevsky&oldid=1080956307"