Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/DFS 346

DFS 346[edit]

Need some help directing further development. Mothmolevna 18:22, 12 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

cla68[edit]

Interesting article, here's a few suggestions:

Needs inline citations. I suggest having a citation at the end of each paragraph citing all the sources used for the information contained in that paragraph.
Add a sentence or two more to the intro so that it more completely summarizes the entire article.
The "Concept" section needs more background detail such as which country was involved and why. What's the historical context for the development of this machine?
Do you have more specific dates for its development during World War II?
The grammar needs to be worked on throughout the article. I suggest you ask a couple of editor's that you've worked with if they might could spare a few minutes to go over it for you.
I think you should list all your sources in the references section. You can look at the references section in B-17 Flying Fortress for an example.

I think the article is off to a good start. Cla68 01:03, 14 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Attack the grammar before citations - its got several areas of non-English idiom which need work to clarify meaning. GraemeLeggett 15:49, 16 May 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I can help you with German texts if there is need for translation or fact checking. Wandalstouring 16:37, 11 June 2007 (UTC)[reply]