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Operation Menu[edit]

Just rounding this one off. See what you think. RM Gillespie 21:28, 14 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin[edit]

Nice article. A few points to work on, though:

  • The lead should be lengthened considerably, to around three full paragraphs; as it is, it doesn't really provide a good summary of the article as a whole.
  • Are there any other good images available? At the least, a map of the region would be useful; and some portraits of the major figures involved (which should be conveniently public domain) might be nice as well.
  • The ending (particularly the "Cambodia was on the slippery slope to genocide" bit) seems a little too melodramatic. I would try for something a bit drier in tone, and avoid getting drawn off on the Khmer Rouge tangent too much here.

Kirill Lokshin 22:24, 14 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

  • Once again, thanks Kirill. Followed your suggestions and made some changes. RM Gillespie 15:55, 17 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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