Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Garden Warbler/archive1
Prose comments by Crisco 1492
- about 10 days after hatching (range 9–12) - Range necessary in lead?
- No, removed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- A wide range of landscape types are used in Africa, - How can one use a landscape? Habitats, perhaps?
- I was trying to avoid using "habitat" too often, but you're right, changed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- S. b. woodwardi reaches Africa via the Arabian Peninsular. - Hmm...
- Aaarghh, fixed, also tweaked sentence a little Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- in sub-Saharan Africa southwards to South Africa. - In or from?
- Changed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- Afghanistan, Djibouti, Iceland, São Tomé and Príncipe, Somalia, Yemen, Svalbard, Jan Mayen and Madeira. - Reasoning behind your inconsistent linking?
- Current FAC practice is to leave independent countries (and continents) unlinked. I've done that and just linked the regions of Norway and Portugal, so I'm not sure why inconsistent Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- This warbler occurs up to 2,600 m (8,500 ft) - feels like you're missing "at altitudes of"
- Changed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- The Garden Warbler was prized as a gastronomic delicacy. - So not anymore?
- Changed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- Folk names for the Garden Warbler, such as strawsmear, small straw and haychat, are often derived from its choice of nesting material, although the commonest of the regional names was "pettychaps". - Where
- indicated Northern England Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- Perhaps "Commonest of English regional names is ... from Northern England?" — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:11, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- I've done a bit more research, and it appears to have national currency rather than just regional, I think the source was a little misleading. Now although the commonest of the English folk names was "pettychaps". Jimfbleak - talk to me? 09:31, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- It appears more likely, from later studies, that segregation of sympatric species, other than the Blackcap and Garden Warbler, is due to subtle habitat preferences rather than interspecies aggression. - This looks like a case for "however"
- Changed Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- cock's nests - Is this worth a redlink?
- I've thought about this myself, but there's not really much to say more than is in the parentheses, so on balance I don't think a stub is justified (I'd write one rather than redlink, see all those blue-linked parasites!) Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- Otherwise solid. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:51, 22 June 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review and helpful comments, I hope I've addressed everything Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:20, 22 June 2013 (UTC)