Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Mount Cayley volcanic field/archive1

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Overall

  • Vast amount of over-referencing; you only need to reference a paragraph from one source once, at the end. Theres no bonus from refing the same thing multiple times! In addition there are many doubled refs in the text.
Handled personally. ResMar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • The Mount Cayley volcanic field is a remote north-south trending polygenetic volcanic chain on the Coast of British Columbia that stretches 31 km (19 mi) from the Pemberton Icefield to near the Squamish River. Is capitalizing "Coast" neccessary? Is it part of the proper name? Also, "to near" sounds akward, I'd delete near.
  • The chain is located in the Sea to Sky Country of southwestern British Columbia, Canada. I read this and thought what? Fixed by changing it to Sky-to-Sea Corridor, which makes more sense.
  • Most of the Cayley volcanoes were formed during periods of volcanism under sheets of glacial ice... During or by?
During. Volcanism is not just about volcanic eruptions. It can also be the movement of magma below the surface with the formation of earthquakes. Volcanoguy 20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Of the entire volcanic field, the southern portion has the most known vents. Here, at least 11 feeders Define feeder.
For what? Feeder is a proper term for a lava conduit. Volcanoguy 20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • The central portion contains at least three vents situated at the Powder Mountain Icefield. To the north, at least four volcanic vents form a nearly vertical line of volcanoes. "At least" is highly repetitive here.

Geology

  • The Mount Cayley volcanic field formed because of the ongoing subduction of the Juan de Fuca Plate under the North American Plate at the Cascadia subduction zone along the British Columbia Coast. Again, Coast capatalized.
  • The interface between the Juan de Fuca and North American plates remains locked for periods of roughly 500 years. Is interface the right word?
Yes. Volcanoguy 20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
K...ResMar 03:16, 30 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • It contains two masses of rock that might resemble ice-marginal lava flows. Might?
Yes, might. It is not always safe to say something is an ice-marginal lava flow without detailed studies just because of its appearence. It could also be a volcanic formation that has undergone extensive erosion. Volcanoguy 20:58, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
That's a solid reason. ResMar 03:16, 30 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- This section is overall very well written, especially the latter part, but oh the over-referencing!

History

  • The line of volcanoes has been the subject of myths and legends by First Nations. To the Squamish Nation, Mount Cayley is called tak'takmu'yin tl'a in7in'axa7en. Where did the sevens come from? oO edit: I think I understand, this is some strange encoding problem with my computer. Perhaps you should take out all the special symbols and put that in brackets, because the charset is very detailed.
I'll take your word on this one. ResMar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nothing for the last section.

Everything you listed is fine. "Coast" in "Coast of British Columbia is capitalized and tak'takmu'yin tl'a in7in'axa7en is proper. Volcanoguy 01:45, 28 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Wait so you've fixed it? ResMar 20:31, 28 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Over-referencing is very rampid. I'm currently busy cleaning it up myself. Come on Tusk, this is the second one to my memory where you got bit for being reference-heavy...ResMar 20:36, 28 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Have a look again. Not every sentence is referenced. Volcanoguy 20:44, 28 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, references cleaned up. Tusk, how are you still ignroing the obvious? ResMar 20:57, 28 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
No, I am not ignoring the obvious. I was going to do the rest when I finished removing redundant referencing in paragraphs that used only a single reference. Volcanoguy 01:10, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Oh whatever it's a null point now. ResMar 13:37, 29 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Case in point:
[[Ember Ridge]], a volcanic mountain ridge between [[Tricouni Peak]] and Mount Fee, consists of at least eight [[lava dome]]s composed of andesite. <ref name="XMG">{{cite web|title=Ember Ridge North|work=Catalogue of Canadian volcanoes|publisher=[[Natural Resources Canada]]|date=2009-03-10|url=http://gsc.nrcan.gc.ca/volcanoes/cat/volcano_e.php?id=gvb_ern_028|accessdate=2010-03-28}}</ref> They were likely formed between 25,000 and 10,000 years ago when lava erupted beneath glacial ice of the Fraser Glaciation.<ref name="XMG"/> Their current structures are comparable to their original forms due to the minimal degree of erosion.<ref name="XMG"/> As a result, the domes display the shapes and columnar joints typical of subglacial volcanoes.<ref name="XMG"/> The random shaps of the Ember Ridge domes are the result of erupted lava taking advantage of former ice pockets, eruptions taking place on uneven surfaces, subsidence of the domes during volcanic activity to create rubble and separation of older columnar units during more recent eruptions.<ref name="XMG"/> The northern dome, known as Ember Ridge North, covers the summit and eastern flank of a mountain ridge.<ref name="XMG"/> It comprises at least one lava flow that reaches a thickness of {{Convert|100|m|ft|abbr=on}}, as well as the thinnest columnar units in the Mount Cayley volcanic field.<ref name="XMG"/> The small size of the columnar joints indicates that the erupted lava was cooled immediately and are mainly located on the dome's summit.<ref name="XMG"/>
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