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Onychopterella was a predatory aquatic arthropod of the order of eurypterids, often called sea scorpions. Fossils of the species Onychopterella kokomoensis and O. pumilus have been found in the United States, and fossils of O. augusti in South Africa. Onychopterella (from Greek for "claw wing") lived from the Late Ordovician to the Late Silurian, from 444 to 422 million years ago. The head was almost rectangular, with bean-shaped compound eyes. The limbs were generally long and narrow with a spine on the tip, and the body was ornamented with small, pointed scales. Lengths ranged from 16 cm (6.3 in) for O. kokomoensis to 4 cm (1.6 in) for O. pumilus. Onychopterella was able to swim, and probably able to walk on the seabed with its spines and dig with its head. The best-preserved specimens of O. augusti show similarities to modern scorpions in their alimentary canal, limb musculature and respiratory system. (Full article...)

Just a suggested blurb ... thoughts and edits are welcome. - Dank (push to talk) 21:10, 28 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good! But I think the second sentence could be written differently, there doesn't seem to be a relationship between "There were three species" and "fossils of ... have been found in...". Super Ψ Dro 13:10, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I tweaked it ... how does it look? - Dank (push to talk) 13:56, 29 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Looks fine. Super Ψ Dro 19:11, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Question: is "often called sea scorpions" or "sometimes called sea scorpions" better? - Dank (push to talk) 00:19, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Probably "often" is more appropriate here. Super Ψ Dro 19:11, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Done. - Dank (push to talk) 20:25, 30 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I guess it's ready. Thanks! Super Ψ Dro 16:50, 5 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]