Talk:Glen H. Taylor/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 13:15, 3 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be glad to do this review.

One issue that I see right off the bat is that several quotations need citation:
- " O GIVE US A HOME, NEAR THE CAPITAL DOME, WITH A YARD FOR TWO CHILDREN TO PLAY"
- "You may have broken my jaw, but I just broke your back!!!"
- "They could end our petty arguments on earth." He went on to say that no matter what the UFOs turned out to be, they "can't be laughed off."
- "Even if it is only a psychological phenomenon, it is a sign of what the world is coming to," Taylor explained. "If we don't ease the tensions, the whole world will be full of psychological cases and eventually turn into a global nuthouse."
- "I was 18, a juvenile leading man in a traveling show, and my hair had begun to fall out. There isn't much demand for bald juvenile leading men, and I tried everything - sheep dip, what have you - and that just made it fall out faster."
The claim "By 1960 Taylor Topper Inc. had become the major manufacturer of hair replacements in the United States" also needs a citation.
I would suggest somewhat expanding this article's lead so that its summary includes every section (and preferably subsection) of the article.
The Roswell comment seems rather trivial to get such weight in the article, and is also uncited. Is this considered important to understanding his policies? Or famous among UFO buffs? I'm not sure this needs an indepedent subsection.

Once these initial points have been addressed, I'll go on to a close readthrough of the article for prose issues; after that, I'll start the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:15, 3 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm marking this as not ready for listing at this time. There's clearly a potential good article here, though, so I'd encourage you to address the above and resubmit in the future. Many thanks for your work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:10, 10 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]