Talk:Grey Matters (Fringe)/GA1
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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:08, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
Comments[edit]
Plot[edit]
- ...and then her obsessive compulsive disorder started soon after. Replace "then" with "that".
- ...Newton has already learned what he needs to know and escapes. Olivia manages to stop their escape... "Escape" is used twice in a very narrow range. You could for example replace "their escape" with just "them".
Production[edit]
- ...it was Nimoy's third episode and consequently last commitment as a guest actor to Fringe... Replace "to" with "on".
- Remember to add (pictured) after the pictured person's name in the caption.
Cultural references[edit]
- I suspect Re-Animator is an adaptation of Herbert West-Reanimator?
Reception[edit]
- "Grey Matters" was watched by an estimated 6.33 million viewers in the United States. Add "In its original American broadcast on [date]," to the beginning, remove "in the United States" and replace it with "according to Nielsen Media Research".
- Remember to refrain from strong words like "love" or "hate" unless they are part of the review.
- Since John Noble is mentioned by full name in the Production section, you only need to refer to him by his last name the second time.
- Remember to italicize Fringe even when the texts are copied from reviews, and also remember to not italicize website names.
Lead[edit]
- Why is the first sentence in the plot summation written in past tense?
- There's an unfinished parenthesis in the second paragraph.
And that's pretty much it. There were no major problems at all, the article was a pleasure to read and when fixed, it will certainly be a worthy GA. I'll put the article on hold for seven days so that the changes can be made. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:08, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
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- Looks good, well done! The article Passes! Queenieacoustic (talk) 18:55, 12 May 2011 (UTC)