Talk:Lake Manly/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:18, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I am taking a look and making some straightforward copyedits as I go (please correct/revert me if I inadvertently change the meaning!). I'll jot questions/issues below: Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:18, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Combine first and second sentences as they are a bit repetitive as is...why not, "Lake Manly was a pluvial lake in Death Valley, California, covering a surface area of 1,600 square kilometres (620 sq mi) during the so-called "Blackwelder stand"." - also link "Blackwelder stand" here.

~~Done, but "Blackwelder stand" is not a separate article - are intra-article links fine? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)~~[reply]

~~If possible, avoid having the first 3 lead paras starting "Lake Manly.."~~

Done, there were alternative terms. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

~~The single sentence 4th para should be joined onto the 3rd.~~

Not sure about this ... may need some rewrite before it can be tacked on. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

How about something like, "Lake Manly and other lake systems in the Great Basin formed by a process of decreasing temperatures and thus decreasing evaporation as well as increased precipitation during the ice ages." or something similar....

Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:55, 16 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

*I'd combine first 2 sections into a single Discovery and naming section. Also combine single sentence paras :I think I got that one; I tend to construct paragraphs around a certain topic, not necessarily a certain length. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

~~Add Levi F. Noble's occupation as a descriptor/adjective. Ditto Gilbert.~~

Added these, I don't think an inline citation is needed for their job description. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

According to some evidence, a southeastward flowing river occupied northern Death Valley during the late Miocene - sounds vague. Describe the evidence

Explained a little more, using a rewording as the literal source text clast assemblages and facies within the 14–6 Ma Artists Drive Formation that are consistent with a northwest-to-southeast–flowing fluvial system during the late Miocene. is probably too technical. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The occurrence of lizards of the Uma family - umm...Uma is a genus not a family...

Aye, fixed this. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

~~Any info on any critters that appeared in the lake in 2005 when it reformed?~~

Didn't find anything... Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

FWIW, Earwigs tool looks ok.

Anyway, over to you. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:43, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Casliber: Answered issues. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Second item addressed, @Casliber: Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:55, 16 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

1. Well written?:

Prose quality:

Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

References to sources:

Citations to reliable sources, where required:

No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:

Major aspects:

Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:

Pass or Fail:

- ok we're there. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:24, 16 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]