Talk:Sí se puede/GA1

GA Review

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I'm afraid that this article does not fulfill the Good Article criteria at this time. While it's a good start and certainly heading in the right direction with several good sources, it simply isn't broad enough in its coverage of the subject matter. A majority of the article deals with Obama's campaign and their use of the phrase, but only a couple sentences are dedicated to the phrase's history, which spans over forty years. In short, what this article needs is more: more info, more history, more more! Here are some specific comments and concerns that may help with the expansion process:

• Per WP:LEAD, the lead section of an article must be a summary of the entire article. There are currently things mentioned in the lead that are not included in the body of the article. For example, since the United Farm Workers is mentioned in the lead, it should be detailed in full in the body of the article.
• In fact, the slogan's history should probably have its own section in which both its beginnings and effects are described in full. The lead says that Chavez and Huerta created the slogan, but why? Give context; what was the UFW? Why was Chavez fasting? How did they use the slogan? How did it infiltrate the media/press/etc?
• Now, take all of the above questions and apply them to the 2006 immigration reform protests, Obama's campaign, and others.
• The article's information as it is now needs to be reordered, perhaps in chronological order, for easier comprehension. Obama's campaign is currently under "English translation", which doesn't exactly fit, and the slogan's usage by Air Canada is under the trademark section.
• All references need to be consistently formatted. Current refs 10 and 11 are not, for example. It's also not necessary for every ref to include lengthy quotes of pertinent information; the links are there so the readers can find the info for themselves.
• The external link section looks like it's on the verge of becoming a linkfarm. A little pruning may be in order.

Hopefully these comments will incite some inspiration for how to better fulfill the GA criteria. This is certainly an important subject, so I would love to see the article improve over time. If there are any questions are comments, or if you feel this review was in error, please feel free to contact me via my talk page. María (habla conmigo) 03:12, 15 February 2009 (UTC)