Talk:Shantae (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:34, 2 January 2016 (UTC)

I'll finish this soon. JAGUAR  22:34, 2 January 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• The second sentence in the first paragraph of the lead is too long. I'd split it in half where "with a fourth entry" begins
• "and acquires items which make her progressively stronger and unlock new abilities and locations" - as well as unlocking
• "even if it did show support for the new handheld, as special features are available when played on a Game Boy Advance" - informal
• Can the comparability with the Game Boy Advanced be elaborated in the lead?
• "the game received favourable reviews and has garnered recognition since its release, being ranked among the best games on the platform" - did critics officially state this?
• "Shantae is a platform adventure game" - link platform game and adventure game
• "adventure game in which players play as the eponymous Shantae" - comma needed in between "adventure" and "game"
• No gameplay image?
• "After, she's magically abducted to a place called the Genie Realm" - she is
• "the game was planned for the Super NES or PC" - SNES?
• "alongside the fact that launching a new IP was considered risky" - elaborate IP
• "and the Game Boy Advance was released in the meantime" - informal
• "The sound was, by 2000, developed in Musyx audio format" - The sound was developed in 2000
• "WayForward Technologies never actually released sales figures for the game, but the game's creator Matt Bozon acknowledges it has sold poorly" - informal and not encyclopaedic
• The first paragraph of the Sales and analysis section is informal and unsourced
• GamesRadar shouldn't be italicised

On hold

The things that worry me most are fears of original research and the informality of most sentences in the article. Some of it needs a copyedit and if you get stuck I'd recommend asking some people at WP:VG, as they'll know what I'm on about. I'll leave this on hold for seven days. JAGUAR  22:18, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

@Jaguar: I think I have fixed everything you pointed out in your initial set of comments.--IDV^talk 22:52, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! OK, with them all out of the way I'd say this article has improved a great deal and should meet the GA criteria. Good work, IDV. JAGUAR  22:58, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks IDV for taking care of this while I was away. Glad the article passed.88.182.48.88 (talk) 08:56, 4 January 2016 (UTC)