Talk:Talking to Yourself/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Unlimitedlead (talk · contribs) 00:05, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@MaranoFan: It is a pleasure to work with you once again. I will take on this GA review; please bear with me. Unlimitedlead (talk) 00:05, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thrilled that you are reviewing this, Unlimitedlead!! The pleasure is most definitely mutual :) --NØ 04:53, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):
    b. (citations to reliable sources):
    c. (OR):
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):
    b. (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Lead

  • "Jepsen wrote it with songwriter Simon Wilcox, and Benjamin Berger and Ryan Rabin from its production team Captain Cuts": What are you referring to when you say "its"? Are Berger and Rabin not humans?
  • I would introduce Schoolboy Records and Interscope Records as record labels.

Background and release

  • "Jepsen announced that the album, titled The Loneliest Time, will be released on October 21, 2022": As you are talking about a past event, "will be" should be "would be".
  • "Jepsen wrote "Talking to Yourself" alongside songwriter Simon Wilcox, and Benjamin Berger and Ryan Rabin from its production team Captain Cuts": See point above about the "its".
  • "School Boy and Interscope Records released...": See point above about introducing them.
  • "...along with a music video, as the album's third single, three days later": What are all these commas for?

Composition and lyrics

  • "...Eli Heisler, Berger and Wilcox programmed it...": Shouldn't this comma be a semicolon?
  • "pulsating, beat-driven": Why are there quotation marks? Is this someone speaking (if so, source the statement), or just scare quotes?

Critical reception

  • "Consequence picked the track as...": Consequence should be in italics.

Images

Can you add {{cc-by-2.0}} {{FlickreviewR|status=passed|author=Raph_PH|sourceurl=https://flickr.com/photos/69880995@N04/48986111926|archive=|reviewdate=2020-03-15 14:26:33|reviewlicense=cc-by-2.0|reviewer=FlickreviewR 2}} to File:Carly Rae Jepsen Primavera19 -146 (48986111926) (cropped).jpg?

Unfortunately, my attempt to add this to the file page was thwarted by a message saying "You do not have the permission to review images, this edit was therefore disabled". Everything else addressed upto here!--NØ 04:53, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
How strange; it did not let me to so either. Oh well. In any case, I will pass this GA nomination. It was wonderful working with you again on a quality article, and I hope to see more from you soon. Unlimitedlead (talk) 12:17, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]