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October 2016[edit]
Hello, I'm Materialscientist. I wanted to let you know that one or more of your recent contributions to Peer pressure have been undone because they did not appear constructive. If you would like to experiment, please use the sandbox. If you think a mistake was made, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. Materialscientist (talk) 12:43, 31 October 2016 (UTC)
Section on historical examples. Comment[edit]
Both the discussion of peer pressure in the holocaust and Rwanda seem slight,with little content relying on too few sources. The holocaust section is only three paragraphs and relies only on two sources. This subsection doesn't recognize the big debates in the historical literature about whether Germans were just ordinary people responding to peer pressure or were evil, incited by a cultural history of anti-semitism. Goldhagen's, Hitler's Willing Executioners is listed as further reading, but isn't mentioned in this section. Goldhagen concludes that the readiness to kill in the face of human and moral proximity cannot be adequately explained by social-psychological theories. AD Moses. Structure and agency in the Holocaust lays out Goldhagen's case s like "peer pressure" or "intoxication." Instead, he points to anti-Semitism as the root cause (page 416). [1]. A Google scholar search on "peer pressure holocaust goldhagen" points to a number of potentially useful sources to make this discussion of peer pressure and the holocaust richer, reflecting the diverse point of view in the literature. Since this section already has a paragraph long summary of Browning Ordinary People, it might be especially interesting to include his response to Goldhagen's book in an essay called : Daniel Goldhagen's Willing Executioner. [2] Robertekraut (talk) 23:51, 14 November 2016 (UTC)
Review of Peer Pressure Article[edit]
I think the article was complete in providing a historical background and applications, but you could possibly include more information about how decision-making training is done. The lead was informative, but I think it would be good to include the major contexts that peer pressure is studied and a sentence on the applications of peer pressure. The structure and the subheadings of the article made sense. Even though there was some overlap in the applications section and the children and adolescents section, it made sense to structure it this way. Overall the article was well written. There were a few sentences that were difficult to understand: in the prevention paragraph I did not understand the correlational relationship that was being referred to. The sources seem reliable since most of them are studies published in psychology journals. Also the results from these studies seems well-documented, although brief, especially in the children and adolescents section. Adding more detail to the studies mentioned in this section could provide more context. -Dorsa Massihpour (dmassihp)
Peer Review on Peer Pressure article[edit]
Hey Renhao! The work you've done on the article seems very thorough and covers the areas in sufficient detail; the article lead is a useful summary; and it is well written and well structured. My only suggestion would be to make greater use of meta-analyses or review articles in your sources, as an aggregate of the results of multiple studies, rather than relying upon the results of individual studies; although this is not necessarily a problem in itself. Svayamm (talk) 05:53, 29 November 2016 (UTC)