Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Dexter (episode)/archive2

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by SandyGeorgia 04:16, 13 June 2011 [1].

Dexter (episode)[edit]

Nominator(s): That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 20:52, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Dexter (episode) is being nominated because it is a perfect example of a top-class, top-quality television episode article. It was previously nominated and everything that was mentioned that stopped it from passing last time has now been fixed. A good reason for its inclusion is that it meets all criteria. Thank you for reading and considering. That Ole' Cheesy Dude (Talk to the hand!) 20:52, 10 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose - I appreciate the effort that's gone into this article, but I don't feel it currently meets the FA criteria. Here are some specific concerns:

Check punctuation, especially for quotes. Footnotes should not be within quotation marks.
"On July 7, 2008 Dexter premiered in Australia on Network Ten, where it was watched by a little less than a million viewers, finishing highest in the 18-49, 16-39 and 25-54 demographics." - source?
WP:MOS edits needed: wikilinking issues, italicization inconsistencies, etc
Use a consistent date format
Use of questionable sources, for example this
See here for problematic links
Copy-editing needed for grammar, flow and clarity. For example, "The crew begun to film the pilot in Miami", "summarizing, in a monologue, that something is to occur on that night", etc
Don't use contractions
Maintain a neutral and encyclopedic tone. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:54, 11 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. I agree with Nikkimaria that this article isn't quite there yet. I'll add a few more examples of why not:

"While solving murders in the Homicide division, Dexter also spends his time hunting and killing murderers and criminals ..."
"... footage shot in both Miami and Los Angeles were used in the episode".
"Rita also has two young children ...". Why "also"?
"... the boy had been killing neighborhood pets ... Hall was in New York and thinking of going back to theatre work ...". Are you using American or British English spelling?
"The incentive was first launched in 2003, and was refunded by the state legislature ...". How can you refund an incentive?
"Shooting began on the first episode on 18 September." Elsewhere the article uses American format dates, i.e., September 18.
"In September 2006, CBS and YouTube stroke a strategic content and advertising partnership ...". What on Earth does that mean? Should it be "struck a strategic content and management partnership"?
"The Seven Seas Motel is an actual location and they didn't change the name for the motel." This is another example of the article's overly informal style.
"... used for the flashbacks of the 8-year old Dexter", Should be "8-year-old Dexter.

Malleus Fatuorum 00:54, 13 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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