Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/History of KFC/archive4
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was not promoted by Graham Colm (talk) 06:27, 5 September 2014 (diff).
History of KFC[edit]
This article just needs someone to verify that the references are fine. Tom (talk) 15:47, 14 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: Welcome back. I just want to make sure we're all on the same page ... the reviewers asked you to check the references last time. Have you checked to make sure the references support the statements in the text, without any close paraphrasing? - Dank (push to talk) 16:54, 14 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: I have no objections, given the references check out. Historical writing tends to be on the clunky side, and this article isn't totally immune, but I'm not objecting based on that. It's a very professional article its editors can be proud of. Stevie is the man! Talk • Work 18:00, 17 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm too new to FA promotion to do this myself (I'm still trying to figure out GA promotion), so I will defer to Dank or somebody else to proceed on that, if warranted. Stevie is the man! Talk • Work 22:33, 25 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Promotions at FAC are handled by the two FAC coordinators, Ian and Graham. - Dank (push to talk) 02:09, 3 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks, this aspect of Wikipedia is something I didn't look at until recently. Stevie is the man! Talk • Work 16:14, 13 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Promotions at FAC are handled by the two FAC coordinators, Ian and Graham. - Dank (push to talk) 02:09, 3 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Support based on what I wrote above. I could quibble about a bit of clumsy writing, but again, it's not enough to get in the way of promotion. Stevie is the man! Talk • Work 16:16, 13 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- First Round of Comments from Ceranthor
- Lead
- Why not mention where in Utah the first restaurant opened?
- Throughout the 1970s and 1980s, KFC experienced mixed fortunes domestically, - Given that this is an article about a huge company, fortune doesn't seem like the best word here. Maybe luck or success?
- n the early 1970s, KFC was sold to the spirits distributor Heublein, which was taken over by the R.J. Reynolds food and tobacco conglomerate, who later sold the chain to PepsiCo. - Which, not who.
- and although KFC's fortunes have waned in the US, - Fortunes again.
- Origin
- After he reached seven, - Turned would be better. "Reached seven" reads awkwardly.
- After leaving the family home at age 13, Sanders passed through several professions, with mixed success.[7] - Any idea what some of these were?
- In 1934, Sanders purchased the larger filling station on the other side of the road and expanded to six tables.[9] - What brand was the larger filling station?
- Early franchisees
- He first used the packaging as a favor to Sanders, - Used is definitely not the right word here.
ceranthor 21:11, 18 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Graham Colm (talk) 06:27, 5 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. No further edits should be made to this page.