Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Hurricane Michael (2000)/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by Karanacs 16:45, 11 May 2010 [1].

Hurricane Michael (2000)[edit]

Nominator(s): 12george1 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets all of the criteria (WP:FACR). In addition, the article contains a comprehensive Meteorological history, as well as Preparations and impact info. Also, all images have appropriate captions and alt text. For these reasons and many more, I think it deserves featured article status. 12george1 (talk) 15:00, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comment—have major contributors to the article, such as Juliancolton, be consulted before this nomination? (No dab links or dead external links.) Ucucha 15:02, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Contacted Juliancolton and just wrote a note on CrazyC83's talk. --12george1 (talk) 15:06, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Just confirming that 12george1 has my "permission" (not my article, of course) to nominate this. I think the lead could use some reworking, as a side-note. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 15:14, 7 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose.

You need consistency with units. Sometimes you have imperial first, sometimes metric, and it varies whether they are abbreviated or not.
Needs US impact.
There are too many instances of passive voice - try rewording for more engaging prose.
Did the rainfall in Newfoundland do anything? You only focus on the winds, but 3 inches of rainfall could cause some flooding.
"Subsequent flights have been made into Hurricane Karen, Hurricane Isabel (while inland), Hurricane Juan and Hurricane Ophelia" - two problems with that sentence. First, Karen was a tropical storm when the flight occurred, and there should be a comma after Juan.
Did the hurricane not impact Nova Scotia at all?
The meteorological history needs date consistency.
The second sentence of the MH needs a complete rewrite. Only because I know the storm do I know what it means, but it needs work.
You should emphasize more that in 24 hours it went from a subtropical depression to a hurricane, quite an impressive feat.
Ref #6 (Discussion #12) doesn't cover all of the information that preceded it, since the citation in question is only a few lines long. This means there are reference problems.
Why did the storm move the way it did? Troughs? Ridges?
What allowed it to strengthen so much in its early life, and what allowed it to maintain its intensity later in its life?

All in all, more work needs to be done. Hurricanehink (talk) 03:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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