Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Sky Blue Sky/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted 20:57, 17 July 2007 (UTC).

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Sky Blue Sky

Self-nom. Wilco's most recent album, released in mid-May. While this is a bit recent, I feel that the article covers everything that has been reported about the album by major media outlets. Recently promoted to GA and hopefully comparable to other album FACs. I await your thoughts. Teemu08 03:35, 6 July 2007 (UTC)

Reference 9 is blank. Pagrashtak 16:17, 6 July 2007 (UTC)

Fixed. Teemu08 20:06, 6 July 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose—1a; the writing is not yet at a "professional" standard. Here are examples of why the whole text needs a massage.
  • "Critics noted the straightforwardness of the lyrics as compared to previous Wilco albums, which received both harsh critique and praise." Flabby and ungrammatical. "Critics noted the straightforwardness of the lyrics compared with those of previous Wilco albums, which had received both harsh critique and praise." Try to find another word for "noted": was this positively viewed? "praised"? Or maybe it's impossible to find a substitute ...
  • "he figured that"—way too informal. That sentence needs recasting, too.
  • "weedy attributes the lyrical directness to HIS listening to material"
  • "the amount of studio effects"—ungrammatical (number). Or "the reliance on studio effects"?
  • "Many of the album's songs were recorded in only one day, with the band reaching a consensus on how each song should sound." "in a single day". The consensus bit—hard to get the message (is it unusual? is the reason for the speediness of the process?) Tony 03:42, 12 July 2007 (UTC)
    • I fixed those specific examples and submitted the article to the League of Copyeditors. Hopefully it will get noticed. Teemu08 20:49, 17 July 2007 (UTC)

• Oppose: The article does not contain a personnel section (see Wikipedia:WikiProject Albums for what should be included in an article on an album). I also agree with Tony. The article needs to go through a copyedit. -- Underneath-it-All 03:09, 16 July 2007 (UTC)
  • Personnel section added (it was made a requirement only three days prior to submission). Teemu08 20:49, 17 July 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.