Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Stones Brewery/archive1

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The article was not promoted by GrahamColm 13:55, 31 March 2012 [1].

Stones Brewery[edit]

Nominator(s): Farrtj (talk) 01:07, 15 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because it received good article status and I feel like it may be worthy of Featured Article status. Farrtj (talk) 01:07, 15 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose: this version

Major reference cleanup issues
- 3, 50: missing page numbers
- 26: No author, author, publisher. Title is 1996
- 22, 48: bare links
- 53: Title is "untitled"
- 30: The Times, 4 October 1965, p. 17. No article name. No author
- 45: What is "Runcorn Brewery: The Unofficial History of a Corporate Disaster" ???
- 55, 56: p61 v/s p. 5 Inconsistent
- Many references do not have author, publisher, date and are generally formatted as [url Title]

I suggest formatting all references with templates {{cite web}}, {{cite book}} and filling up at least page numbers (not web), title, author, publisher, date. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 11:12, 18 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: I have not read the article yet, but I don't think the opening paragraph works well at the moment. To begin by saying that Stones Brewery is a brewery is surely a statement of the obvious. Also, to try to cover the foundation, takeover and closure of the brewery in one sentence is perhaps unwise. May I suggest that you alter the paragraph text along the following lines:

Stones Brewery (William Stones Ltd) was founded in 1868 by William Stones in Sheffield, West Riding of Yorkshire, England. and purchased by the Bass Brewery in 1968. After its closure in 1999 its most famous brand, Stones Bitter, was continued by the Molson Coors Brewing Company.

Another point: why do you need to show latitude and longitude? A brewery is a group of buildings with a postal address, not some remote geographic location that needs to be identified by coordinates. If the answer is that other similar articles have them, my reply is, don't repeat the follies of others. Also, at a glance, there may be problems with certain referencing formats, e.g. 22 and 48 are bare urls. Brianboulton (talk) 11:21, 18 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

(Ah, I see that another reviewer has picked up several referencing issues) Brianboulton (talk) 11:23, 18 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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