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List of Everton F.C. managers[edit]

I've listed this article for peer review because it's undergone the WP:FOOTBALL list treatment and I think it could be close to heading for WP:FLC. I think it's as accurate as it can be given the variety of sources available, and I hope the lead is vaguely entertaining. I'd like to receive comments from anyone, particularly Everton fans! As always, thanks in advance for your time... The Rambling Man (talk) 19:15, 20 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Mattythewhite[edit]

Good work. Some comments:

  • Jimmy Gabriel's Scottish and then English!
  • Also, he was caretaker during both of his spells according to Everton Stats.

Nothing else really. Mattythewhite (talk) 08:17, 21 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Matty, both comments attended to... The Rambling Man (talk) 08:29, 21 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

ChrisTheDude[edit]

As ever, first class work from TRM, with very little to pick up, just the following minor points:

  • was the club secretary for the club's first season - remove one of the usages of the word "club", probably the first
  • the club enjoyed their first prolonged period of success - enjoyed its, surely....? Everywhere else you use the word club as a singular noun
  • Following success in the Charity Shield twice before another League championship - I'd replace "before" with "and", personally
  • Former Everton player and Oldham Athletic A.F.C. manager - any reason why the Oldham link isn't piped to remove the AFC?
  • Injury crises and players such as Andrei Kanchelskis being sold led to Royle's resignation in March, 1997, - ends with a comma but then a new sentence starts immediately afterwards
  • He was replaced with fellow Scot - I'd say "replaced by"

Hope this helps!!!! ChrisTheDude (talk) 09:29, 21 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Chris, as ever, thanks. I've made all your suggested changes. Cheers! The Rambling Man (talk) 09:59, 21 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]