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London, Ontario[edit]

Just resubmitting this peer review. Not much response last time and the article is now much more complete than it was at that time.--Will2k 20:48, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, AZ t 00:51, 21 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hello Will2k... I'm not sure if your goal is featured article status, as it may have been at the last peer review, but I have some comments in that respect. FAs require plenty of inline citations these days. I also checked the existing inline citation for "London has a small crack cocaine problem and Crystal Meth use is also on the rise." The RCMP article doesn't technically say, I don't think, that drug use is on the rise. This could be read as trying to establish a certain point of view (I'm certainly not accusing you of that!). Article readability can be improved by converting all the bullet lists to prose (which is another FA requirement). If you have to remove some detail to accomplish that (e.g. not listing every radio and TV station), I think that's OK. When years are mentioned by themselves, WP:DATE says don't link them. –Outriggr § 06:58, 21 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]