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Info/Six_Lowa_Records

Jennyrod (talk) 04:04, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

The article has been tagged for deletion as it doesn't meet the general notability guideline. You can address these issues by taking a look at WP:ORG or WP:CORP. -Reconsider! 12:30, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Lana_Myers

Would love for someone to take the time to validate the information on this page. Thanks in advance.

DomainWorldAccess (talk) 04:22, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Please try adding more useful names to the references so the reader can get an idea of what the linked page is about. Also please consider adding links and/or an Infobox as well. Chevymontecarlo - alt 11:43, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Illusoir3/Inner_City_Elegance

Just looking for some feedback, and the pictures only seem to be working on certain browsers... Thanks!

Illusoir3 (talk) 07:41, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

The main issue here is the notability of the subject. Please take a look at WP:MUSIC for more information regarding the notability criteria for bands. -Reconsider! 09:12, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

References help to improve the notability of the article's subject. According to WP:CITE, Wikipedia cannot be used as a reference, so please remove the link and move it to the 'External links' section if you can. Chevymontecarlo - alt 11:48, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Master_Piano_Technicians_of_America

New article I'd like to have reviewed. Also, I'm not sure if I did something wrong when moving it. It still has the notice on top as not being an article but as being a draft in userspace, and the article still does not show up in search. Did I get something wrong in the move, or does it just take a while for the server to update? Many thanks for taking the time to help a noob with his first article. :)

Pianotech (talk) 12:53, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

You did it correctly(probably) - there's just something wrong with that template. I'll remove the banner. Good job! ~ QwerpQwertus · Contact Me  · 22:07, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your help and encouragement since I started this little article. :) I found the problem: I forgot to remove the blurb about userspace at the top of the edit page before moving it. (doh!).Pianotech (talk) 22:37, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

I have improved the links and corrected the category link for you. There was a space in there so the bar at the bottom was not appearing like it was supposed to. I hope this is OK. If you have links to external sites that you want to include, it's best to put it in a separate section (such as an 'External links' section) instead of actually in the article. I do think you should try adding sections to the article, if you can. It'll make it easier to read. If you have any questions or comments please send me a message here. Thank you! Chevy<spanstyle="color:#FF0000">montecarlo 09:11, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the help, I appreciate it! I'll definitely keep working on it and heed your suggestions. Pianotech (talk) 10:22, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

I took Chevymontycarlo's suggestion and added sections to the article. Again, this is my first article so I'm not sure if the heading style is correct, but the article does seem to flow better now that it's divided. Thanks for the suggestion! Also, I moved the reference to Piano Craftsmen of America to the Introduction where I also mention the Piano Technicians Guild for better continuity. Again, thanks for the feedback. You guys have been and continue to be a great help, and it is very much appreciated! Pianotech (talk) 10:56, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

No worries :D I hope it was helpful. Chevymontecarlo - alt 12:05, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Papagel/EFront_(eLearning_software)

Please provide your comments on this article regarding structure, notability, neutral tone and sources. Thanks for your help!

Papagel (talk) 13:08, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Looks good - it looks notable, is neutral, and is well-sourced (the pic and infobox are also good), but you may wish to check that the interface in that picture isn't copyrighted or trademarked. ~ QwerpQwertus · Contact Me  · 22:10, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

You may also want to consider adding categories to the article. Chevymontecarlo 09:14, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

University_Consulting

This is a new article (my first on Wikipedia). I would love feedback or questions or review from some of the more veteran Wikipedia users. Thanks.

Moremarbles (talk) 14:54, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

I have tagged the article as being too much like an advert. I suggest you change the tone before someone decides to nominate it for deletion. For example, you don't need to refer to "media giants" and you don't need a conclusions section where you call university consulting "win-win". You may be able to get some help by posting a message at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Universities or Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Business, but I suggest you do the best you can to make it as unpromotional as possible before you post a message - the article as it stands could put people off. Yaris678 (talk) 21:09, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Project_GreenHands

This is an article on an environmental organization based in India. I'm affiliated with this organization so I wanted to make sure that the article was neutral before I went live. Appreciate any feedback.

Regstuff (talk) 15:08, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Good job, though it is still slightly in favor of the company, but it's is highly sourced and had good content. Also - did you already upload the picture and it isn't working or did you just not upload it yet? ~ QwerpQwertus · Contact Me  · 22:14, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Thnx for the feedback QwerpQwertus. Can you please be more specific about what seems to be in favor of the company. Also I did upload the logo, but under a claim of fair use. It was deleted because such images aren't allowed in userspace drafts. Regstuff (talk) 04:14, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

What QwerpQwertus means is that the article sounds a bit like an advertisement for the company in places. It needs to be made more neutral in places. Chevymontecarlo 08:15, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

Douglas_Mental_Health_University_Institute_Foundation

I want to know when my article will be either approved or rejected and thus the comment box at the top that says "this is a template to be removed after the article has been reviewed" will be removed? That having been said, I would like to know if you have any feedback to my article? I'm a first-time user and I don't know if I have request feedback or if my article will eventually be reviewed. Let me know if I need to do anything else.

Thank you in advance for your help! It is much appreciated.

TijanaP (talk) 15:42, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

You probably need more reliable third-party sources and references that aren't the company's that will establish notability and prove it's accuracy. It is also slightly in favor of the company, so you might to try to make it more neutral. Good job though! - and this is what you should do to get it reviewed, but nobody can "reject" an article. ~ QwerpQwertus · Contact Me  · 22:19, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Please try and add more useful names to the references, like this- [[http://www.apple.com|Apple site]]. Also consider adding categories to the article. Chevymontecarlo 08:27, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

OK, wow, thanks to both of you. It's wonderful knowing people are out there to help. What about translating the article into French. We are a Quebec organization so it's very important to have text in both languages. Do I do a separate French post as a new post or is there an option to post a translation? Thanks in advance...

Well, you could translate the article into French and then add it to the same section on the French Wikipedia. That would be OK. If you have any questions concerning this please send me a message here. Chevymontecarlo - alt 12:01, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

Veterans'_Memorial_Hall

I would welcome any feedback in order to improve this article. Thank you in advance!

MtRainier7 (talk) 17:06, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Please try and add categories to the article. You can start your search for appropriate categories for the article here. Categories help list the article with similar articles, and therefore helps to increase the amount of visitors to the article. After searching for the appropriate category, you can add the link to the category at the bottom, where they will appear in a bar at the bottom automatically. For example, I could add [[Category:UK companies]] to the bottom of the article and when I saved changes it would appear as a link at the bottom of the article, and the article would be listed in the category. I hope you understand - I try to use examples to help but I can understand that it may be confusing. If you have any questions please send me a message here. Thank you. Chevymontecarlo 05:22, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Mohitmarwaha07/Enter_your_new_article_name_here

i have written an article i want your suggestion whether its good enough to be published. and how to change heading of the article

mohit marwaha 17:56, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

There are many problems with the article. Please try and add Categories to the article, and add names to the references, like this - [[http://www.apple.com|Apple website]]. Also you need to work on adding links and rewriting the article to make it more neutral. Chevymontecarlo 08:24, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

EM_Research,_Inc.

Need some valuable feedback, please.

Anitambowers (talk) 18:53, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

You didn’t indicate notability, so it was deleted. Before writing the article, identify reliable sources you can use, and then be sure you are citing sources throughout the article. Taric25 (talk) 06:58, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Pitch_constellation

Could someone review this article and remve the "new unreviewed article" template?

Thanks

72.94.156.208 (talk) 19:47, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

I replaced it with a different template. You must use inline citations using citation templates. Taric25 (talk) 07:10, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Also please try and add Categories to the article. If you add the links to the bottom of the article they appear in a bar automatically at the bottom. Chevymontecarlo 08:21, 27 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Squishey_ie/Royston_Brady

A new article I would like reviewed please.

Squishey ie (talk) 20:20, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Hi, to add links to other articles in the article all you need to do is place [[ ]] around the name of the article you want to link to. You don't need to use URLs to create links unless it's a non-Wikipedia site. For example, [[Loughborough]] creates a link to the Loughborough article. Hope you understand. Chevymontecarlo 05:31, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Hi Chevymontecarlo. Thanks for the feedback and amendments. I changed the Excalibur film reference as per your suggestion. Is there anything else I should add/change or do you think it would be ready to go live? First article so want to get everything right before putting it live. Thanks for the help:) Squishey ie

Yeah, well done for improving the article but I think the last two sections of the article are lacking in links. Please try and add some more if you can. Thanks! Chevymontecarlo - alt 11:57, 30 June 2010 (UTC)

User:Lynn329/Date_Safe_Project

Hello, my article was reviewed while in draft under wizard. I would like the page to go live. I was also asked if I would like the person who reviewed the article to add an info box for me, and yes, that would be nice. Please let me know how to proceed and make the page live and remove the user template. Thank you http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lynn329/Date_Safe_Project

Lynn329 (talk) 22:39, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

I would hold off on taking it live for now. You have your sources, which is good, but you you must use inline citations using citation templates. Also, assert the notability of the Date Safe Project. What awards have they won? What has their impact been on the world? Are they local, or national, or international? Do they serve a large geographic area? Are they unique or unusual in any way? List the ways that your sources show the notability of the Date Safe Project. Taric25 (talk) 07:21, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

The_Toothaches

are these references sufficient?

Dueldutycoats (talk) 22:46, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

Yes, but more can always be added. References work best if citations are used. Also consider separating the article out into sections - you can do this by placing == == around the name of the section that you want to create - for example ==Life== would create a section with 'life' as the name. Hope these tips help. Chevymontecarlo 05:27, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

You also need to integrate the references into the body of the article. Also, adding an infobox would be helpful. -Reconsider! 11:19, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Database_Marketing_Agency

After getting the notability and cleanup requests, I added more resources and references to the article. What can I do to further improve and complete the cleanup process?

Db0527 (talk) 23:35, 25 June 2010 (UTC)

I cleaned it up, but you need to assert the company’s notability. See Wikipedia:Notability (organizations and companies) for details. Taric25 (talk) 08:24, 26 June 2010 (UTC)

Also, if you find any sites that are related but not really suitable for use as a reference add them to the external links section instead. Chevymontecarlo 08:19, 27 June 2010 (UTC)