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Branders.com[edit]

how do i make this good enough to be qualified as a helpful wikipedia entry? thank you guys. :)

Palconit (talk) 05:14, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I think from a formatting and style perspective it's very good, but really I think you need to work on adding reliable references from third-party sources. Chevy monte carlo 19:34, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:MikeLynch/List of colleges affiliated to Visvesvaraya Technological University[edit]

User:MikeLynch/List of colleges affiliated to Visvesvaraya Technological University draft. I understand that there are quite a few redlinks, but well, it is a daunting task to create articles for every single college. I think this list is needed, mainly because it will add value to the Visvesvaraya Technological University article. I still have some minor additions to the article, but since they are minor, I am asking for a review of this article. Thanks.

TheMike •^{Wassup doc?} 08:55, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Erm, I think you've done a nice job, I can't really see any problems...perhaps someone else can review. Chevy monte carlo 19:37, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

RedAlkemi[edit]

We have created this page about RedAlkemi which is one of the oldest web development and Internet marketing company in India. We are not doing this to extend our public profile in one of topmost websites on the web and educate people about the work RedAlkemi do. Given below are some of the reference links.

http://www.redalkemi.com/press-room/ This contains many pics of newspaper cuttings. RedAlkemi (formerly PugMarks) has been present in print media for quite sometime now.

http://www.tribuneindia.com/2005/20050502/cth1.htm#28 http://www.tribuneindia.com/2005/20050927/cth2.htm#9 Some of the articles mentioning the organization in one of the leading local newspaper in Chandigarh, India.

http://wonderwoman.intoday.in/wonderwoman/story/83812/Career-woman/At-the-forefront.html Interview of our COO in one of the leading magazines in India.

Hope these are enough reliable citations for your review. Let us know in case some changes are required in the page.

Best Regards, Sanket

RASyndication (talk) 09:13, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm, but where is the article? I think it has been deleted by CSD. TheMike •^{Wassup doc?} 19:03, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Monzeeki/Gray Area Foundation for the Arts[edit]

This is all i can put up at the moment from todays research. Would just like some general feedback as to how its shaping, however more so the structure. thank you Monzeeki (talk) 09:56, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good according to me. Of course, it would be good if you expanded the article a wee bit. Also, it would be good if you could remove the unnecessary bold stuff. It usually isn't needed. Hope this helps. I think you can put it live. TheMike •^{Wassup doc?} 19:06, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I agree with MikeLynch(aka TheMike) with his suggestion on the bold "stuff". Instead, consider creating links for those bold items even if they create red links. WP:UNDERLINK. You may decide against red linking an item that will not likely have its own article in the future. WP:REDNOT. In that case, you may decide to keep the item in bold and perhaps explain why the extra emphasis is needed on the article's discussion page so future editors will retain the emphasis. Kjmonkey (talk) 22:32, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:GeordieMack/shaw method of swimming[edit]

Help! I think I need approval for this article before it can go live.

Thanks for your assistance.

GeordieMack (talk) 12:18, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The subject of the article seems interesting to me. However an issue for me is the use of many primary sources for the article content. Likewise, the subject may be viewed as self-promotion as many of the citations come from primary sources. WP:SOAP. Kjmonkey (talk) 23:23, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Electriplast[edit]

Can someone please help me with this.

Smkatz22 (talk) 17:22, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I found your article at User:Smkatz22/Electriplast. It isn't clear exactly what you wanted help with, so a few comments. (1) Your link doesn't load because it is misspelled. (2) Links should be inserted into the article at points which state facts that should be verified. If this is done correctly, they will automatically be listed in the "References" section. (3) Insert links like this: <ref>[http://www.somename.com]</ref>. (4) You need independent references to support your claims and to be careful you aren't just writing an infomercial. Tkotc (talk) 18:03, 9 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Michael_Vink[edit]

No specific questions, I'd just like it reviewed by someone else so I can remove the "unreviewed article" box.

NZ spiderman (talk) 18:35, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I feel it is pretty good, but try introducing more sections (preferably in prose format) about awards (if any), and maybe about personal life. Remember, WP:MOS prefers prose over just lists. Hope this is helpful. TheMike •^{Wassup doc?} 18:48, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Electriplast-a new conductive plastic[edit]

News Article[edit]

Smkatz22 (talk) This isn't the right place... Perseus, Son of Zeus 20:33, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

User:Eagering/BlockMaster[edit]

I would like to get input on if it is better to add a company's products in the company article, or if the preferred way is to add another article about the product?

Eagering (talk) 18:48, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

you need to add citations for the Overview section along with other unattributed statements. without citations, you may have the issue of original research WP:NOR and possibily WP:SOAP Kjmonkey (talk) 00:46, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Taipei Metro EMUC371[edit]

For the article Taipei Metro EMUC371, which I recently created, is there anything I can do to improve it? (I can barely find a single "about" on Google: [1].

Perseus, Son of Zeus 18:54, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jeff_Song/Kanguera[edit]

this is my first article. I created another version of this a few weeks ago (much shorter and with no refs) and it was deleted. other editors suggested I rewrite it in my user space and then ask for feedback - so here I am :)

Jeff Song (talk) 23:20, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

i commented in the Discussion page of your article. to summarize, you need citations for everything you state in the article or attribute the source of the information inline and refer to a secondary reference. Kjmonkey (talk) 00:58, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]