Wha? it was a single link... SOmebody changed it. Changed it back to a single link.
Comment: I made it two links because in a previous FAC of mine, a reviewer (who was a non-gamer) did not understand what E3 (with year) was and had to go through two articles (the article with the year, then to the E3 article itself) from the link I provided just to find out what Electronic Entertainment Expo was. --JDC808♫ 05:34, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Or you could keep as is and just put "E3" in parenthesis after that with "E3" being linked to the main E3 article. I don't believe there would be issues with blue links then. -> "2009's Electronic Entertainment Expo (E3)" --JDC808♫ 16:47, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Sterling's features could be customized by the player. Gameplay in Armada of the Damned was centered around a choice system that would affect the character's appearance, personality, weapons, attacks, quests, and story developments. - So could Sterling both be customized by the player and by the player's choices, or indirectly customized by the player through his/her choices?
By both. Some of his features are customized directly by the player, and other by their choices.
Legendary and Dreaded - Any relation to good/evil alignment (like in D&D)?
Yes. This is explained in the plot section.
had several unique default sets that shaped the way the game was experienced, - sets of what?
"Features" is better than "sets". Replaced.
Land combat was similar to most role-playing games. Sterling had a light and a heavy attack, which could be combined to create combos that increased the damage he inflicted. - This sounds like real-time attack (mostly common in Western RPGs), rather than turn-based (JRPGs, particularly FF). Might want to differentiate between the two, or at least point to Pausable real-time.
It is real time like Western RPGs. Fixed.
curse - link to the correct meaning (curse as in magic, rather than curse as in a swear word)
If the ship was boarded and the enemy crew was eliminated, the player received more loot than if the enemy ship was destroyed. - If the player's ship was boarded, or if a player boarded an enemy's ship? Very key difference, not quite clear from your wording here.
Added that the ship that's boarded is the enemy one. Ha.
The game was to follow James Sterling, a pirate captain whose main mission was to travel across the Caribbean and make a reputation for himself. - you've repeated this sentence three times already
Oops. Removed.
Part of #Plot sounds like gameplay
Yeah, they were very tied and as little info was revealed, I had a hard time trying to separate them.
dark - as in nighttime? Different word.
Changed to obscure. Hope it works.
That's definitely not what they meant in the source; how can you fear something you don't know? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:13, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest merging #Gameplay and #Plot, as there is a lot of overlap
I removed all gameplay-repeated details from plot. Now it looks more like a plot section hehe.
the development of action-adventure and role-playing games for Disney. - Link the genres. Also, I love how we contrast "Disney" with Turok: Dinosaur Hunter
Is that good or bad?
My main point was the genres, assuming they aren't linked elsewhere. The Disney/Turok was just a bit of snark. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:13, 7 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Armada of the Damned was supposed to include an interactive choice system to shape the game, making choices an important feature. - Above you say that it did include a choice system
Changed to "included". Ooops.
Still more overlap, such as "The game world included land and sea locations across an open world environment. It was technically enhanced for standard third-person combat and naval combat."
Removed the overlapping text.
feel familiar to the characters featured in the films. - Holy alliteration, Batman! Any way to rework this?
Added Pirates of the Caribbean before "films".
When did Propaganda first announce this game? Turok was 1999, and the article talks about "films", meaning after Pirates of the Caribbean: Dead Man's Chest (2006). That's a long span.
The article says when on the #Reception section: it was announced in 2009.
An original music score was written for Armada of the Damned, - by whom?
Let me take a look. I think that the composer's name was never revealed.
"Disney Interactive Studios confirms the cancellation of the Pirates of the Caribbean: Armada of the Damned video game which was scheduled to be released in 2011." - We really don't need a quote box for this.
In October 2010, Disney Interactive Studios announced that Armada of the Damned's development team would be laid off as part of a restructuring program. Disney also announced that Propaganda would finish development of Tron: Evolution and its planned post-launch downloadable content. - Could be combined.
Tweaked. DOn't know how to merge them...
Any way to avoid saying Tron: Evolution four times in two sentences?
Yes. Tweaked.
Most journalists -- followed by a whole bunch of depressed comments. Most means there were some happy ones. Anywhere? Also, this paragraph would go best in the next section.
Well, no. They all felt dissapointed...
Overall very nice, although there are some structural and grammatical issues. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:22, 5 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
