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1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

The article is very well written and rich with detail.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

The writing could be a little more formal. For instance, "The 1930's began a desperate time in the American economy as the Great Depression began to take its toll across the nation," could be reworded to say something such as, "During the 1930's, the United States entered into a period of nation wide economic stagnation as a result of the Great Depression." There's also room for improvement with respect to the use of commas, for instance, when describing Oscar Depriest as, "a wealthy black politician and Chicago landlord," that sentence fragment could be ended with a comma to distinguish it from the rest of the sentence. I'd also advise changing, "1930's Economics," to something more specific such as "1930's Economic Crisis."

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

I would advise adding a section in that focuses specifically on the protests. Such as how one section is about, "The Eviction of Diana Gross," I would also advise distinguishing the protests themselves in a specific section.


4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article?

Yes, I noticed how each subsection, such as, "1930's Economics," has one paragraph. This shows me how long each of the subsections could be in order to give them a sufficient amount of detail.

Temporary Profile (talk) 18:03, 27 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

1. First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? This article is very good at describing events and the background. I’m very impressed by the way you were able to take the information and connect it together. This is a fascinating protest that has many political implicatiosn that wouldn’t be assumed.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I think breaking sections up into paragraphs would make the timeline easier to follow as well as separating events, such as in “The Eviction of Diana Gross” where there are multiple killings but they blend into one paragraph. I also think that emphasizing the fact that many white workers were at the memorial and there was a communist support behind this would make the articlereally stand out. Adding more links to things would add more interest as well.

3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? The biggest thing to improve the article would be phrasing quotes in your own words rather then having so many large quotations. It’s distracting from the argument and most seem to be able to be rephrased in a way that would make the writing more cohesive.

4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I am definitely going to add more to my background—this article made me realize the social and economic context is as important as the event itself. It also helped me see how you worked in an outline.Missybryan (talk) 20:57, 27 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]


1. There is a lot of good information in this article and it is put into clear sections that tell this story in a logical manor. All the material is very well sourced and put together and its clear that a lot of thought and effort went into this. I particularly think "the prelude" section is a very smart idea.

2. If I had to pick something that I would change, it might be to introduce some of your scholars when quoting them. In your section on 1930s economics you draw from Rosenzweig, and while there is no doubt they are a knowledgeable scholar on the subject, the average joe might not be familiar with them. Maybe give one line like "economics theorist Rosenzweig...." and then when bringing the up again you could simply state their name. Also, I remember in class that you mentioned having a hard time contextualizing your event, and here you do a really good job. Maybe, however, there are some things you could cut or be more concise on, so that the events of your article are more heavily focused on.

3. This is a great article, and any "most important" thing I choose that needs changing will be nit picking, but maybe change the title of the economics section from "1930's economics" to "Chicago in the 1930's", and other changes to make your article and its sections as specific to your topic as possible.

4. I loved how you used the sections of your article to tell the story ahead of time, they really prime your mind for what you are about to read. If one had to go back through the article and re-read something, they could do it easily as the sections are not too big and clearly defined. Something I definitely need to work on! Gloorjf (talk) 03:55, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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