Talk:David Petraeus/GA1

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 20:58, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

This article will need to have all bare URLs replaced.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:58, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
This article will need to have all dead links replaced.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:58, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Fix the citation needed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:58, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Fix WP:OVERLINKING: (The Washington Post, United States Ambassador to Iraq, USA Today, The New York Times, Ryan Crocker, etc.)--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 19:15, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Move File:GEN Petraeus Aug 2011 Photo.jpg to commons and get all his images tagged with {{personality rights}}. I did not check the licensing of each ribbon, medal, award or rank.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:51, 18 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]


I would quickfail most articles in this state, but I want to read this article so I might as well comment on the rest.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:58, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Check external links in toolbox to the right.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:36, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
WP:LEAD
Personal life
Done Go Phightins! (talk) 00:20, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Deleted whole sentence. Go Phightins! (talk) 00:20, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I was talking about Petraeus was remembered as "always going for it in sports, academics, leadership, and even his social life."--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:52, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Education and academia
1970s
1980s
  • You start using YYYY-YY format to describe time periods. If you are talking about a school year or a basketball season that seems natural. It seems like you should use prose to say something like 1983 to 1985 or use an – to say the 1983–85 time period. I prefer the former, but would accept the latter.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:46, 28 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
1990s
  • Is the first sentence suppose to say he moved from one place to another place. It just says he moved from one place.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:31, 30 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "one of the more dramatic incidents". I am not a medical person so I don't know what to request, but there should be some indication of injury severity. I.e, Loss of x units of blood, x# broken ribs, x bullets penetrated him, x degree wound or some measure of wound severity should be stated, IMO.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:31, 30 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
101st Airborne Division
Multi-National Security Transition Command – Iraq
Multi-National Force – Iraq (spring 2007)
Multi-National Force – Iraq (summer and fall 2007)
Multi-National Force – Iraq (spring 2008)
Change of command
U.S. Central Command (fall 2008 to summer 2010)
Commander of US and ISAF forces in Afghanistan
  • I think you owe the reader a sentence explaining "McChrystal's comments about the Obama administration".--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:41, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "replacing the July 1, 2009 version" - were any significant changes noted by the critics and pundits?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:41, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • The promotions table seems malplaced to me (the non-military reader). I think it either belongs near the top of the biological chronology or at the bottom with the other rank and decorations tables.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:41, 7 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
CIA Director
ANSWER: Yes. (Benghazi before, during, and after 9-11-2012.) Charles Edwin Shipp (talk) 21:25, 10 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Health problems
Additional recognition of note

This article is a very solid B-Class article. There is lots more to do. I am failing this at the current time. This is a free WP:PR for someone who really wants to make this a WP:GA.

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