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Good articleDemetri McCamey has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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DateProcessResult
April 16, 2010Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on February 23, 2010.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that college basketball point guard Demetri McCamey and Big Ten Conference foe Evan Turner were once teammates at Isiah Thomas' former high school?

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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:08, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this is a good article, though I found some concerns:

  • "He was part of a 2005 Chicago area sophomore class that was considered to be the best in the history of the state of Illinois." Cite needed.
  • "but McCamey was at the time mentioned as the potential next great St. Joseph's product (from a school that had produced Isiah Thomas)" I would tweak it to fit in the Thomas note better. It flows a little odd as is.
  • "During the 2008 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament he shot 6 for 6 on his three point shots against Purdue," The 'shot 6 for 6 on' needs a slight rewording, plus the 6's should be spelled out.
  • "which set a Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament record and tied the Illinois school record for three point field goal percentage." Tied the record in a game? Or the season? IF the former it seems redundant, of course it'd be since he hit all his shots. If the latter, reword so it's clear.
  • I like the use of a gallery in the junior section; make the page cleaner while still using the images.
  • The structure of the junior season feels odd. It starts with noting his stats for the season, which would feel better near the end. I'd restructure this paragraph to make it more chronological.
  • "His 254 assists in 36 games resulting in a 7.06 assist per game average eclipsed Deron Williams' 264 in 39 games (6.77 average) in 2004–05 NCAA Division I men's basketball season for the Fighting Illini single-season average record." Needs some cleanup, as well as commas - or maybe split that into two sentences.
  • "His total of 254 was the fourth highest in Big Ten history and only 20 shy of Mateen Cleaves' Big Ten single-season record of 274 (Williams, 264, Fighting Illini). His total of 525 after his junior season left him 291 short of Cleaves' career record of 816 (Bruce Douglas, 765, Fighting Illini)." It took me a bit to realize why those were in parenthesis - put them into the prose and cleanup those sentences a bit; it'll look nicer.

I'll put this article on hold. Get to it when you get to it, and I'll pass it when it's fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:08, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It is 2nd in line. I should get to it within a week.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 17:55, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
FYI, I am doing my taxes. I will be mildly inactive on WP for a few days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:08, 13 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Not a problem. Hopefully this can be done tomorrow though, not much left to fix. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:50, 15 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I still have to clean up my Schedule D, print everything out, get to the post office. Then I will be back on WP a little more. It should be done tomorrow.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:37, 15 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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