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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:52, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:52, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much ! — Dianna (talk) 02:14, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • He was mentioned eight times in the Wehrmachtbericht, not many German soldiers were mentioned that often (Kesselring 14x, Mölders 11x), maybe worth mentioning
  • "Manstein received the Swords of the Knight's Cross—the third highest German military honour—on 30 March 1944" the Swords to the Knight's Cross were never Germany's highest military honour!
  • Manstein's recommendations regarding the Bundeswehr included more than just length of service, I think this should be expanded
  • His son in law, Heinrich von Lingenthal-Zachariae, was a Brigadegeneral in the Bundeswehr, maybe worth mentioning
  • Hi Mr Bee. If you have some sources for the new information, I will add it in. Regarding the Bundeswehr, the two biographies I have available have no further information on that topic, so if you have some sources/information please let me know. Thanks. -- Dianna (talk) 13:31, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sure, I will be adding here based on the book: Knopp, Guido (2000). Hitlers Krieger. Goldmann Verlag. ISBN 3-442-15045-0
According to Guido Knopp, page 170, Manstein spoke to the legislative body of the Bundestag on 20 June 1953. He lectured on his view of the defensive analysis, strategic power constellation, professional army or draft and advised that the German army needed the draft of at least 18 months, better 24 months. MisterBee1966 (talk) 07:03, 17 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Preliminary comments

  • The WWI section needs expansion.
    • He graduated from the Prussian War Academy before the war began? I thought it was a multi-year course of instruction? Green tickY
    • Detail what units he was assigned to during this period. Green tickY
    • How was he wounded? Green tickY
  • Inter-war era
  • Poland
    • Was the term "Einsatzgruppen" used in Poland? I thought it wasn't introducted until Barbarossa.
      • It looks like the term was used in Poland. Evans (2008; page 16-17 of the paperback edition) says Heydrich formed five Einsatzgruppen, later increased to seven, to follow the soldiers into Poland in 1939. He says they rounded up and killed intellectuals and potential members of the resistance. Shirer (1960; pages 958-959) says the Einsatzgruppen were at first tasked with rounding up Jews to place them in ghettos, and were repurposed as killing squads two years later for Barbarossa. -- Dianna (talk) 00:43, 16 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • IIRC, the Battle of the Bzura was an abortive Polish counterattack that the Germans ended up crushing. If I'm correct, then clarify that this was not something that the Germans planned, but rather did on the fly.
    • What does the bombardment of Warsaw have to do with Manstein?
  • France
    • I found this section confusing, probably because the first paragraph seems to be an attempt to summarize the whole process, unlike the chronological exposition used earlier.
    • The Manstein Plan article seems to mirror what I remember about the complex development of the war plan and should be used as a guide for this section.
    • This is awkward: The plan was after the event nicknamed Sichelschnitt (sickle cut).

More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:52, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

    • Be sure to use Roman numerals for all German Corps to reflect German practice and link them throughout the article. Green tickY
  • Barbarossa
  • Leningrad
    • How about a map for this operation or his earlier operations as part of Army Group North? Green tickY Added one, though it does not pinpoint all the locations mentioned in this article.
  • Stalingrad
    • Combine first two paras. Be sure that cite 81 supports date 4th Pz Army entered the city. Green tickY Cite 81 checks out, but 4th Pz Army is specifically mentioned at the bottom of pg 409, so I have tweeked it.
    • 23rd Panzer Grenadier Division is properly 23rd Panzer Division, not Panzergrenadier. Be sure to link to the division's article as well as any other divisions like the 336th (red links are perfectly acceptable). Green tickY
  • Kharkov
    • What unit was Hausser commander of? Mentioned later, but move that to the first appearance. Green tickY
    • I'd suggest using the term Backhand blow somewhere here as Manstein's counterattack is famous under that name. Green tickY
    • Consequences of the German victory here seem a bit understated. Mentioning the Soviet casualties is good, although the numbers seem a little low, IIRC, but need to emphasize that the counterattack recaptured lots of territory lost to the Soviet offensive as well decisively defeating it. Green tickY
  • Operation Zitadelle
    • Standardize if you're going to use German names for operations first or their translations. Green tickY
    • 9th Army was not a panzer army. Green tickY
    • This reads awkwardly: until his own reserves had all been committed. But Hitler was adamant. Green tickY Reworded
    • Soviet losses at Prokhorovka were very heavy, but hardly decisive. Green tickY changed "disastrous" to "serious"
    • Can we get a map that focuses on the southern pincer for this section? Green tickY
  • Kursk Dnieper
    • Link to the Dnieper River. Green tickY
    • Specify that all the units listed at the end of the first para were divisions. Green tickY

More later--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:46, 23 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your excellent advice. I think all items are completed; ready to advance when you have time. -- Dianna (talk) 02:46, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

As a drive by question/comment, was the estate Manstein bought in 1944 part of the scheme in which Hitler bribed his senior generals with property? (and, from memory, other goods) - the timing would be about right. If so, this should be briefly noted. Nick-D (talk) 06:01, 24 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the tip; Lemay speculates (page 431-432) that this may have been the case, but says he found no proof. My other primary source (Melvin) does not mention the endowments. -- Dianna (talk) 00:39, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dniepr campaign
    • Link to 17th Army, 1st Panzer Army Green tickY
    • 1st Ukrainian Front was not brigade sized; it was roughly the size of a German army. Green tickY
  • Bibliography
    • Delete page count from McKale Green tickY
    • Weinberg needs publisher location Green tickY

Fix these few niggles and we'll be done here. I think that you should submit this article to an ACR and then send it to FAC.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:09, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much, Sturmvogel. Your expert knowledge of the subject matter helped pinpoint where material was missing or needed to be better laid out, and now we have a fine article the whole Milhist crew can be proud of. Best wishes, -- Dianna (talk) 00:39, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, but there's one small mistake to fix before I can promote this. Link to the German 17th Army, not the Soviet one.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:44, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
 Done (*blushes*) -- Dianna (talk) 00:53, 25 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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