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Featured articleHMS Hermes (95) is a featured article; it (or a previous version of it) has been identified as one of the best articles produced by the Wikipedia community. Even so, if you can update or improve it, please do so.
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DateProcessResult
August 16, 2011Good article nomineeListed
November 15, 2011WikiProject A-class reviewApproved
July 29, 2012Featured article candidatePromoted
Current status: Featured article

Late ACR comments

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Hawkeye closed the review just as I was adding this so will put here... Performed quick copyedit of first half. Looks pretty good but I think the lead is too long -- there's detail and repetition of wording that could be cut, for instance how she was the first designed but not first commissioned carrier. At the very least I would lose (or move to main body if the citation is required there) The design of Hermes preceded and influenced that of Hōshō, and she was launched before Hōshō was laid down, but was commissioned more than six months later than Hōshō. As another example, at the end of the lead, you don't need ...that the Japanese did not attack. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:34, 15 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]