Talk:James Wood Bush/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk · contribs) 00:46, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I'm going to review this article. I'll list the issues soon.Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 00:46, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

• @KAVEBEAR: Here are the issues:

• Try not to use too many citations for one point per WP:OVERCITE. I'd recommend less than four.
• ...; he was one of a small number of Hawaiians to do so.... I suggest rewording this, as it sounds a little awkward.
• ... Bush was no exception.. This sounds possibly like original research. If I was mistaken and it is not, this still should be reworded for the same reason as before.
• Fix the clarification issue.
• The first paragraph of the "Legacy" section sounds like an essay.

• Thanks, Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 01:07, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

• I will address these issues when I have the time. Thanks. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 22:52, 1 March 2016 (UTC)

• I don't think I have the time to make the necessary improvements with school and all. Please feel free to fail it right now and I can come back to it and address your comments and then renominate it. Thanks. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 19:32, 12 March 2016 (UTC)

• Failed--Tomandjerry211 (alt) (talk) 17:17, 13 March 2016 (UTC)