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Reviewer: LM150 (talk · contribs) 14:07, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, happy to review this for GA. Thanks for your efforts so far - here are my comments/feedback.

  • "dated international fugitive Jho Low" - is this important for the lede?
It certainly isn’t. It looks like someone else added that recently. Trillfendi (talk) 15:50, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and is currently married to Snapchat CEO.." - could we start this as a new sentence? eg. She has been married to Snapchat CEO Evan Spiegel since 2017.
 Done
  • "Kerr's words it was too painful to stay there" - perhaps rephrase this, eg. Kerr said it was too painful to stay there
 Done
  • Career beginnings - first paragraph has no references
 Done
  • "Circa Kerr signed to.." - is there a typo/missing word here?
 Done I think Circa is a stray word there. Trillfendi (talk) 17:14, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and was featured in Australian television advertisements for clothing and hair-removal products." - source needed
 Done removed because a suitable source couldn’t be found. Best I saw was a gallery image from Herald Sun but that isn’t good enough for it. Trillfendi (talk) 17:32, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • add wikilink for CBS
 Done
  • "estimated $3.5 million" - I assume all earnings are in US Dollars? I suggest that you add USD to the very first instance, eg. USD$3.5 million
 Done I went ahead and just did it to all
  • "Kerr has annually placed on the Forbes list of the world's highest-paid models." - unsourced, and is this sentence needed? Throughout the article, we've already got several mentions of these in each year.
 Done
  • Religion section - her quote needs to be formatted with a block quote
 Done

More comments to follow, thanks LM150 14:07, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Not sure if it's just me, but the Public image section (about David Kiely) sounds like gossip and non-notable material. Feel free to disagree though.
  • Remove ALLCAPS in references, eg. THIS AUSSIE SWIMWEAR BRAND IS LOOKING FOR THE NEXT MIRANDA, SHANINA OR GIGI

 Done

  • What's happened to reference 34, there's Huff Post and Sky News combined into one?
 Done it lacked closing ref tag at the end of the Huff Post reference Trillfendi (talk) 18:02, 17 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In some references, like 57, the 'Name of publication' is in the 'Publisher' field, eg. The Huffington Post Australia. Could we be consistent and just use the 'Name of publication' field?
  • Reference 63 doesn't work: "Kerr's ex Guilty". (and perhaps provide archived sources too)
  • Reference 79 doesn't work: "Miranda Kerr Has Welcomed Her Third Son." InStyle Australia.

Thanks, LM150 18:21, 8 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Update - additional comments may come soon before wrapping this up. I haven't forgotten about this review. Thanks, LM150 18:30, 9 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Trillfendi:, just coming back to this review. I'm happy to make a few copyedits once all the above has been addressed. Also, perhaps cleanup the personal life section? The quote about her sexuality - I don't think that's relevant or adds anything here (Wikipedia is not gossip!). I would perhaps remove the subheading "Relationships" as you address legal issues here too. Thanks. LM150 13:30, 8 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Trillfendi and LM150: is this still being worked on? -- RoySmith (talk) 13:18, 14 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
LM150, may I suggest this be closed as failed. It's obviously not going anywhere. -- RoySmith (talk) 12:57, 27 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Trillfendi, apologies but I'm going to fail this GA for now. Let me know when you're ready to renominate and I'll review it again. Thank you! LM150 17:56, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@LM150: Understandable, I’m open to revisiting it later. Thank you for volunteering. 👍 Trillfendi (talk) 18:21, 28 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]