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Reviewer: Nomader (talk · contribs) 18:38, 23 February 2022 (UTC)
Going to review this article this week. Love racing games in all their forms, so excited to dive in. Nomader (talk) 18:38, 23 February 2022 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- In the beginning of the gameplay section, I'd change "must drive exotic cars" to "drive exotic cars". The 'must' is unnecessary there and should be cut. Further, is "race" a better word to use here instead of "drive", or would it be too specific in this case?
- I agree that 'must' is unnecessary. I also replaced 'drive' with 'race', though I don't really have a preference.
- It says "races races" -- should cut out one of them.
- Fixed
- I found the "Pursuits have the ability..." sentence to be a bit confusing. Is that "police pursuits have the ability"?
- That's correct. I added the word 'police' to avoid any confusion.
- "Tier" shouldn't be capitalized, not a formal title.
- Fixed
- Should be "an online multiplayer mode" instead of "a".
- Fixed
- In the development section, "Feaures" should be "Features"
- Fixed
- "Occured" should be "Occurred".
- Fixed
- "criticised" should be "criticized" in the reception section (although honestly this may be a UK spelling thing, in which case keep it)
- Fixed. It is UK spelling, but the game is American, so 'criticized' is correct in this article's context.
- "disadvanatge" should be "disadvantage"
- Fixed
- "longetivity" should be "longevity"
- Fixed
- I think you can cut down this sentence a bit. Instead of "is in native tongue, which varies depending on where a race takes place", which sounds a bit awkward, I'd say, "remarked that the language of the police chatter is in the native tongue of wherever the race is taking place." I think the original version here makes it sounds like native tongue is the language.
- Replaced with "remarked that the language of the police chatter is in the native tongue of the race location", which is a bit simpler.
- I think you could cut out the "where multiple cops can chase players at the same time" in the reception section -- you defined this type of race in detail in the gameplay section.
- Removed. I also replaced 'however' with 'but' now that the sentence is shorter.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- No copyvios detected and extremely detailed sourcing here. Copyvio checker only saw quotes as being flagged, so good to go. Spot check of sources passes muster.
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- Fits the standard scope of a video game Wikipedia page well here.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Will pass as soon as the generally minor grammatical pieces I listed above are fixed. Great, terrific work here! Nomader (talk) 23:12, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
- Thank you for your review, really appreciated. I think I have addressed all the issues you have raised and also made some minor copy-edits. Please let me know if you find any other issues. Regards --Niwi3 (talk) 12:27, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay on my end -- good to go! I'm passing the article here, really terrific work. Nomader (talk) 06:24, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
- No worries and thanks again. --Niwi3 (talk) 09:05, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay on my end -- good to go! I'm passing the article here, really terrific work. Nomader (talk) 06:24, 1 March 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review, really appreciated. I think I have addressed all the issues you have raised and also made some minor copy-edits. Please let me know if you find any other issues. Regards --Niwi3 (talk) 12:27, 26 February 2022 (UTC)