Talk:No Stairway

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:No Stairway/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 10:03, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Hi, I'm MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing this article anytime in the next 4-5 days.

Infobox[edit]

Lead[edit]

  • Unlike Glassline.
  • "first released online in April 2015 and issued on cassette by the label Patient Sounds in August. " → first released online and later issued on cassette by the label Patient Sounds, in April and August of 2015, respectively.
  • "technique; in two" → technique. In two
  • "Greenwald recorded people playing" → Greenwald tapped people playing
  • recordings → find other word, a synonym
  • In which countries was released as a cassette?

Background[edit]

  • "However, he rarely went to the shop and instead bought equipment from local stores like..." → "However, he rarely went to the former shop and instead bought equipment from local stores like..."
    • Changed, but why do we need the "former" part of the shop. Only one story was described in the previous sentence editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
It could be a thrift or any other kind shop, just saying "shop" doesn't sound correct, hence why the "former". You are almost done, ping me when you finish. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 16:58, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "wanted to make a lot out of recording" → poor vocabulary, replace it.
  • "One day out of boredom, he hung out at a Guitar Center near Atlantic Terminal while waiting for a train, when he heard someone playing a song by Green Day on a guitar and made notice of the instrument's poor tone". → When removing the additional sentence between commas, the other two make no sense whatsoever. Try to re-arrange this
  • "I remember thinking like, 'what if I could feed that through these weird reverb pedals I have at home?' 'Would it sound any different?' and it sort of hit me 'why don't I just record other people playing and then sort of use as my paint'". → just use the "..." or quotebox.

Production[edit]

  • "what would be the first sound that would later be featured on the album..."→ what would be the first sound to be featured on the album.
  • "he recorded a guy who" → he taped a guy who (not always using the same words).
  • "As he described how he felt when he was editing the sample"→ The singer described how he felt while editing the sample
  • "Greenwald started recording of the album in a Guitar Center in Brooklyn, then at a shop in Baltimore" → Greenwald started recording the album in a Guitar Center in Brooklyn, and then at a shop in Baltimore.
  • "Greenwald recorded whatever sound he predicted he could make better quality out of when editing them later on" → Greenwald taped whatever sound he thought that could become better in quality when editing them later.
  • "recordings to work with at his home, where some snippets were played through a 4-track tape recorder or old pedals and some were looped or used as synthesizer patches". → recordings to work at his home. Some snippets were played through a 4-track tape recorder, others were old pedals and some were looped or used as synthesizer patches.
  • "As Greenwald described" → As described by Greenwald.
  • "There was a lot of panning. There was a lot of trying to connect things that were seemingly un-connectable. A lot of times I would think that a track was finished, but then I remembered that I had some other sound I wanted to use so I would comb back through it and add some fetching little tone somewhere. The editing and the recording processes were married. The studio was very much a part of the instrument." → This quote length is quite big, please user your own words every now and then in the quote.

Release and reception[edit]

  • "Patient Sounds distributing the album on cassette on August 6" → In the same year, on August 6, record label Patient Sounds distributed the album on cassette.
  • "reminders of Guitar Center's commercial success during the 1990s pre-Internet period to a current time where the chain of retailers may shut down quickly due to extreme financial decreases". → reminders of Guitar Center's commercial success during the 1990s pre-Internet period, which contrast with a current time where the chain of retailers may shut down quickly due to extreme financial decrease.
  • "Live at Guitar Center topping the list". → Live at Guitar Center topped the list.
  • Make a reference to the genres on the infobox per reviewer, after that remove the references from the infobox.
  • The album was given a rating grade in some sources, make a note of that in this section

Track listing[edit]

References[edit]

  • Most sources have publisher but not work, work is mandatory to GA status.
  • Just a suggestion here: Archive all the links.

Categories[edit]

  • Add: English-language albums
    • There's no lyrics in the songs, there would have to be lyrics in the English language in order for the album to be under that category editorEهեইдအ😎 16:19, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • My bad. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:55, 18 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Overall GA review[edit]

  • It should be a reference to Greenwald recording, producing and doing everything in the record. Did he also mastered and mixed the records? If not add that.
    • Mentioned that he mastered and mixed the album in the production and composition section. Also, it's kind of obvious to the reader in the Background and composition that Greenwald's doing everything, including recording the iPhone snippets and editing them together in Pro Tools. He's the only credit on the album, no one else was involved (if you don't count the people playing the instruments at Guitar Center in the recordings)
  • Well rounded article, very interesting to read. I recommend a submission to "DYK" after promoted to GA. On hold for 7 days.